The Kissing Gate

You stand on the threshold

and stare, goodbye etched;

on your face, lines that hold

the workings of fate wretched.

Are we the darkness between

two brightly burning flames?

Or just puny pawns

in destiny's childish games?

The wonderless wonder

of dreams torn asunder?

or just another life

that forever went under?

Either way it's time,

today is the date.

Carry on & forth

beyond the kissing gate.

Reviews

[Lloyd Frieson-Small]

Beautiful mastery within this work, you are on your way to the level of unrestrained genius. I see that you cling to the rhyming genre, and while your work is impeccable, you will eventually break away from this genre and immortalize your art form in a genre of your own. Bravo, and continue your journey of mastery..

[Devesh]

Unrestrained genius? :P I'm flattered :D Thanks a lot! :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Amazing artwork and words. I like the title. "the kissing gate." The poem had the tone of sadness and good memory. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Blue]

Devesh, you astound me. I almost forgot you are a romantic! Glad I was able to read your poems again.

"Carry on & forth
beyond the kissing gate."

Ohh.. Sweeeetttt.

[Devesh]

I am glad I do. :) I am not a romantic, LOL. The kissing gate is actually the name of a particular type of gate. But I like how almost all you people have interpreted it as something romantic. :)

[Blue]

HAHAHA. You got us fooled. :P

[Devesh]

Well, if people like to think of me as one, I do not mind. As long as no one asks me whether I am a Twilight fan :P

[Blue]

Potterheads and Twilight fans never agree. ;) I have read all the Twilight books, though. I wish I hadn't.

[Devesh]

How did you know that I am a Potterhead? :o Hehe, I feel you. I read a page or two and then vomitted.

[Blue]

You forgot? You told me last time that you are a Potterhead, too. ;) Hmm. 50 Shades of Grey is worse.

[Devesh]

Forgive me, I am becoming old. :P I agree!

[Jennifer K]

I love how the questions and doubts flow within the poem leading up to an inevitable ending. It is very nicely written!

[Devesh]

Thank you for reading, Jennifer :)

[Christina Carpenter]

Aw I really enjoyed this poem!! It has great word choice and I love the theme :)

[Devesh]

Glad you enjoyed it! Thank you for reading :)

[Spacecadet]

The words broke my heart and the imagery took me back to a certain place. I absolutely love how this is written and how beautifully the words go together! Great job :)

[Devesh]

Thank you for reading :)

[Elina]

This is so beautifully written, Devesh.

[Devesh]

Glad you liked it, Elina. Thanks for reading! :)

[Annabelle Lee]

great piece! nice rhyme !

[Devesh]

Thank you for reading, Annabelle. :)

[Emily Ring]

A sad turn of fate. Very lovely. Nice work.

[Devesh]

Thank you for reading :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

how did we become the darkness in between?

and the only kiss left on our lips..is it a kiss goodbye?

[Devesh]

I like your interpretation of it :)