In Remembrance

Black as death the gloomy sky, 

a gentle breeze, the morning nigh.

The wind, a faint breath, leaving the realm,

of monsters and men, ascending into the heavens.

Where there is no pain, there is no sorrow,

only the joyous rain, and no morrow.

The wind brushes against my cheek,

and silently reminds me, 

of all the times I never had,

of all the things I did not say.

Where once there was silence,

echoes now the melancholy song.

The ballad that no ears hear, 

but the heart does sing.

Author's Note

Feel free to suggest how I can improve. Thanks!

Reviews

[KAin]

Excellent work!
This is a fantastic poem; in terms of imagery and diction, almost flawless.
The style is rich, and felt much like an incantation, conjuring another world for us to explore...
or at least, a small piece of it, giving the reader a taste for more.
Thank you very much for sharing.
Keep writing!

[Devesh]

Thank you for reading! :))

[Surya pradha]

a beautiful poem which just flows. great work!

[AYVID N]

The poem transported me to another realm. My soul would surely think thus, once freed of its mortal captivity. Now this is what I call poetry! Applause.

[Devesh]

Thanks a lot, Divya! :)

[Addy]

Such good descriptions. The imagery is amazing.

[Devesh]

Thank you :)

[Parimal Pratyush]

To be very precise, the description is unbelievably vivid. Goosebumps. All your poems have outstanding descriptions. You are talented, observant and really soft at writing. Amazing piece again.

[Devesh]

Thanks a lot, Parimal! :)

[Mirra]

Been craving to read some wonderful piece and this one's excellent! Feels like each word is hefty and loaded with emotions. Kudos!

[Devesh]

Thank you :)

[BlackRose]

One never realizes what chance they had until they lose it. We must remember to say what we need to when we have it more we reference while the person is still living.

I know you rhymed in spots, and I would have the other parts match too. It would flow better that way. Other than that it's a wonderful piece that gets the mind thinking.

[Devesh]

Thank you, I'll try to tweak it a bit :)

[Rita L. Sev]

This really is a beautiful and thoughtful piece, Devesh.

[Devesh]

Thank you for reading :)

[Ravyne Hawke]

Beautiful.. a reminder to let go and just be in the moment.. I love your imagery in this.

[Devesh]

Thank you :)

[melissa]

This is amazing poem keep up the great work and keep them coming i can't wait to read more