In the Wake of Dreaming

Just trying something a little different with this one.

In the wake of dreaming I pray

To the sun, king of a new day

For light to come beaming
I pray in the wake of dreaming

 

For hours, I lay in your company

On an enlightening journey

In a field of budding flowers

In your company I lay for hours

 

We are such good friends

That even when the moon ascends

I still stare intently at you, my star

Such good friends we are

 

I forever laze in your splendor
Such feelings it does render

As you set the morning sky ablaze

In your splendor I forever laze

Reviews

[bluessadmood]

Oh what a lovely write,surely this felt different,
in the wake of dreaming I pray,for light to come,as I lay in your company
such good friends ,even the moon would ascend,and I stare intent at you my star
Forever laze in your splendor,such feelings it renders,as you set the sky ablaze
This was so nice ,lovely images ,lovely thoughts..everything just perfect
lovely write..

[Lau]

This is really good, I love it, especially the way you play with first and last line in each stanza. It's different, but still with a touch of originality, lovely work and write!