His coexistence

His coexistence

A Poem by Raven Lane
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November 2014

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I eyed my chest, observing the way it rises up and down, caving in and out, as I lie in this warm bath I've drawn for myself
My mind dances with thoughts of you while my blood pumps solely for you 
I can't help but to wonder if my heart beat synchronizes and pumps to the same rhythm as yours at this very moment
Though this may be a silly thought to occupy, what a beautiful one it is

© 2016 Raven Lane


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You have caught really well in an original way this feeling of being taken over by love.
Just a small slip -I guess you mean 'lie'
Well done!
Alan
You might like to try my story ' the letter' Thanks

Posted 8 Years Ago


Raven Lane

8 Years Ago

Thanks for catching that! I appreciate the feedback. I'll check it out :)

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Raven Lane
Raven Lane

Lilburn, GA



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My name is Raven Lane I am 20 years old. I enjoy writing with my free time. I am a very genuine and open person. I hope to share my work and get inspired by others. more..

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