Boy and Girl {2}

An online conversation between a broken couple. Boy's perspective.

Girl logs on. 

 

Boy logs on.

 

Girl: hey                                                                                                  She’s online.

 

Boy: hi

 

Girl: how are you?                                                                         Why does she care? I left her.

 

Boy: really good. what about you?                            

 

Girl: great! everything's great!                                                                  Great? How come she’s great? What’s great in her life?

 

Boy: that's good.

 

Girl: yeah.                                                                                  

 

Boy: look, i'm sorry, but I had to leave. i couldn't be with you anymore.       Not a lie.

 

Girl: No, it's okay. I understand.                                             

 

Boy: Are you sure?                             Everything can’t be great.

 

Girl: yes.

 

Boy: stop lying.                                                           

 

Girl: What?                                                                 

 

Boy: I know you. I know you're not okay.                  I still know her.                 

 

Girl: Fine. I'm not okay, and I don't understand why you just left me! you didn't even say goodbye!

 

Boy: I know. I'm sorry.                                           What else can I say? I can’t tell her I regret it . . . what if she asks me to come back? I can’t do that. I had to get away. 

 

Girl: why didn't you say goodbye?                                           I couldn’t see you cry. I knew you’d cry.

 

Boy: it would've been too hard. breakups are messy.              

 

Girl: you're just a coward.                                                                                Am I? 

 

Boy: I know.                                                                                                    I am. 

 

Girl: come home. i still love you.                     Please. Don’t tempt me.

 

Boy: i can't. i've met someone else.                        Anything to keep her from wanting me back. She’s too good for me.

 

Girl: but i love you. 

 

Boy: i knew that when i left. it changed nothing.                             

 

Girl: give me a second chance.                 I wish I could.

 

Boy: i'm sorry, but i have to go.                                                          

 

Girl: no! stay!                                                           Please. Stop making this harder than it has to be.

 

Boy: i really am sorry.                                                                              And I still love you too.

 

Boy logs off. 

 

Girl: i am, too.                                                                             

 

Girl logs off.

 

 

Author's Note

this is the boy's perspective in an online conversation with a girl he used to date. i used to have it as him being a total jerk and uncaring about how badly he hurt her, but i decided to change it. it didn't sit right with me. here he still cares, but for unknown reasons, he can't come back. i like this version much better.

Reviews

[Vertigoingnowhere]

this is awesome good job!

[Break The Broken]

amazing, isnt it the same as the 1st one though?

[emma]

@ Brenden Moran: i know i couldn't quite catch what a guy would really think, but i tried. i think it might be a bit much to ask a guy to help me revise it (unless one offers) but i'll still think it over. thanks for the input, it's appreciated.

[Brenden Moran]

To be honest with you I don't think you've captured the mindset of the guy as you captured the girl's perspective in the first one. I would talk to some guys you know and show them this conversation to see how they would revise this. Some of it is still quite good and correct though. Good Job

[Unknown]

@ caitlyn wilken: Thankyou for being on my side!:)

[FadingShadow]

Heeey its me the a*s hole

[grace]

at Abby Zubs: totally agreed! most guys are like that, makes a good point!;)

[Malychyte]

Ah great way to make a note at the end!! :P I appreciate you saying "not always are guys jerks". It's good to know the stereotype can be overcome! Even though there are guys like this x_x but yeah very cool, I like how you set this up, it was easy to follow and well worth reading! Keep at it!

[Unknown]

hahhhaaa:). I like Boy because he's as true as any boy is. They lie to you to make you happy but inside they aren't. Emma it was great, so happy you added his point of view, very nice!

@13ReasonsWhy: All guys are like that;). Even the nicest guys lie:).
P.S. not trying to pick a fight;)

[grace]

Wow! hes he biggest jerk every! very self-centred and selfish!! still loving it though, its great. :)