The Heart's Bridges

A poem I wrote for a contest.

A bridge connecting two hearts.  The hearts are joined, never to be separated.

 

But then you chipped a piece off the bridge, and it slowly began to crumble.

 

The terrible fights, the long lonely nights, and the anger began to break the bridge more.

 

Soon the bridge was wobbling and bending, but I couldn’t see it.

 

One day, standing on the bridge, it collapsed. A fight that ended the joining of our hearts.

 

I fell with it, consumed by my own love, and I drowned in the loneliness that lay under the bridge.

 

 

 

A bridge connecting two hearts was broken beyond repair, leaving me in utter despair.

 

I don’t know if I’ll ever rebuild a bridge and connect my heart to another’s,

 

Because I am still buried beneath the rubble of the first bridge, suffocated by my own stupidity.

 

 

 

The heart’s bridges are flimsy and weak and can break easy. But I didn’t know that when I joined my heart to his. 

Author's Note

I really don't know if this is any good. I'm wondering if I should even post it . . .
hopefully it's good and you like it, but i'm not making any promises.


**This was for a contest.

Reviews

[Mauricio Montoya]

It definitely touches home, nice work

[Amplyyours]

I love the metaphor and imagery, you pulled me in at the very first line. And the last line sealed with doubt and heart break not knowing if you can allow construction to connect your heart to another.

It really spoke to me and I thought it was a good write.

[Pi Cee]

Familiar feeling, I can relate. Good write.

[Sarah]

I realy liked it, it was sad but still very good
XD

[TheKaylaPup]

i really, really like this. i think t he words themselves are perfect, but i would space them out more across the page, like, break some of the lines into two lines.

[Break The Broken]

bridge connecting two hearts was broken beyond repair, leaving me in utter despair.
I don’t know if I’ll ever rebuild a bridge and connect my heart to another’s,
Because I am still buried beneath the rubble of the first bridge, suffocated by my own stupidity.

best part, that was really good, and i betyou won the contest?

[13ReasonsWhy]

I love love love this!!! It is by far the best poem i have read a in a long time. I can relate to it and it is perfect. Perfectly wonderful.

[Death Girl]

I love it and it is totaly awsome

[The Girl with the smile]

This poem gave me chills! I can relate to it all too well!! I love the imagery! Great write!