old beyond years

you smile sadly
your eyes old beyond
your years
you laugh bitterly
in the face of
excitement already
privy to the disappointment
to come
you walk back straightened
by the pain you
have yet to feel
each step taking you
closer to the hell
you have envisioned
you are too young to
hate this word
and yet you are already
full of its bitter poison.

Reviews

[Lyric]

This is cool, I really like the way it flows, and it all comes together in the end very nicely, good job :]

[Nikolean]

I like the idea, how someone is walking into a "hell", overall, it flowed very well