I've been standing outside your memory, looking in...

I've been standing outside your memory, looking in...

                 I've been looking for meaning, finding none,

Crying inside my heart, always holding back...

                 I've been seeking hope, without faith...

I've been holding this bagful of sorrow, without feeling,

                  Speaking of love, without articulating...


Waiting for you to come home, knowing you won't...

Reviews

[linear]

Now aint love a b***h.........you write how once I felt.......with feeling and deep emotion, your pen leaves ink blots of pure hearts blood upon the sheet... :O)

always your friend Linear

[jacob erin-cilberto]

wow how sad...you don't even keep me in your memory...i hold hope of you coming home to me...and yet i am not even a slight thought in your mind...

this tears my heart out when i read it...

"holding a bagful of sorrow"

it's what you left me...

tight, compact with an impact...

jacob

[Heather]

First, the title got me.. I wanted to know more of this poem. You said so much, made me feel so much with this short poem. I am sad, because I know this feeling, so well, yes I do. You did such a great job with this poem, it moves me and hits close to home.

[Writingfox]

Short. But conveying such a broad range of emotion. I know exactly how this feels. Wanting to reach out but always stopping just before you do, for fear of hurting again. Wonderful piece.

[?]

This is an amazing piece, although very heartbrakingly sad. But relatable in so many ways.
I am one of those that cry inside my heart, always holding back. Holding the biggest bag of sorrow. I seek hope but have learned that you have to have the faith in order to find the hope.
Filled with emotions, a very heartfelt piece.

[johnnyqueer]

I like this. I can relate to the emotions in this. Nice write.

[Coyote Poetry]

I learn 23 years ago. Negative words leave us a lone and create a bridge we can't repair. I understand this poem. When you piss someone off and close door to friendship. Hard to get forgiveness. Your words powerful and filled with emotion. Thank you for the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[africa]

Far out lol. You know when you read something and the mind creates the rest of the sentence before the eyes see it...I thought you were going to say you were standing outside with a bag of bagels!!! So funny. Good stuff. Thanks for the laugh.

[An owl on the moon]

You paint a brilliant image of the close distance between two people.. lives coming undone... Your words weave the most wondrous glimpses that are emotionally vivid.

[Roe]

i thought this was really good then ending is my favor it