A shattered heart

Praying in sleep’s last lucid nod

she lays down her heart to the night

drifting off into a hopeful dream

having long given up loves endless fight

Her only escape on the wings of change,

away from the world she knew

beating fervently, offered no flight

drifting solemnly, a sadness true

He wishes on stars

shooting about the night sky

in fields of long tall grass

where often, his dreams would die

Shattered hearts like puzzles

every piece, a place of its own

whispered promises meant so little

when she never returned home

Together a journey, they wander

unable to find love within

like soldiers marching to off a war

they never had a chance to win

Thrust upon them each, lies

unto an unblemished heart

shaded and jaded in jealousy

their dignity do they impart

If she only knew, his thoughts

Words, if he only said

the three that mattered most

she would be his instead.

Reviews

[Deviant Works]

Aw, InkSlinger. Must you always make me cry, my dear friend. The fourth stanza and the last stanza just about killed me. This time, thankfully, I had a box of tissues by my computer when the tears started to flow. You write beautifully and your words always seem to come from my soul. I love this poem even though it broke my heart.

[closed]

ah
your sentiments on this matter are similliar and varied I see. You do not write with a light or dark pen of love, but a gray one, and it permeates each stanza, bringing to life this lover's plight in ink^

impressive^

-Dream

[Zoe Jay]

I like this. It's so genuine that it somehow feel familiar. Very evocative and vivid. I love the verse which starts "together a journey", it's really well written. The whole thing has a lovely rhythm and flow. It has the feel of an old-fashioned love poem, which it is in a way, but it is obviously conflicted - it is both romantic and dark, about love, and lost love, things that could have been. The memory hangs in the air like a delicate filigree of interwoven feelings. The conclusion is really powerful, concise, and strong. Great poem! :-)