On the path..

Just past denial
somewhere on the road to heartache
you will see the path meander...
that's where you will find
sadness gathering.

Cloaked in resentment
basking in bitterness
frolicking with sorrow
that's where you will find
sadness gathering

Bathed in empty tears
tied to a bickering tongue
washed in unending depression
that's where you will find
sadness gathering

Hidden under accusing eyes
battered by prattling tongues
wrapped in love's mockery
that's where you will find
sadness gathering

Crooked fingers point the way
along the path of infidelities
draped in suspicion, and deceit
that's where you will find
sadness gathering...

Reviews

[Bette]

well done

[Robin]

that dark path perfectly illuminated by the glare of your spotlighted images

[Jūdan FyreHeart]

You had some very solid images which built and carried the emotion required for this topic. While keeping it simple and open to the reader to view the images as they pleased.

[Coyote Poetry]

When we make the wrong decisions. We can lose our way. I like the strong language and story in your words. Doing the right thing allow us to live a good life. The bad things will catch up with us. A very good ending to a outstanding poem.
Coyote

[serpent]

sadness presented so beautifully that i felt like embracing it gleefully..the choice of word and imagery is exceptionally wonderful and without a doubt has played its role in making the piece exceptionally beautiful and artistic...there are times when moving out of a phase seems to be impossible... specially when its plagued by sadness is involved...this phase can hurt...can hurt like hell...but always remember the best thing about pain is that it asures you that you are alive..and whatever doesnt kill you, makes you strong...

good job with this write, friend...write on!

[CompellingComposer]

This is truly a beautiful piece of art. It's incredibly sad and well written. I love it. Great job!

[Stacey]

That's most definitely where you'll find it!!! While sad, the meter and message are very clear. The prattling tongues, crooked fingers, resentment are great indicators of sadness...word choice is spot on! Wonderful write:)

[Shelly Braen]

Like a sorrowful fairytale. Such imagery and animated personification. I adore your colourful language.

"Crooked fingers point the way
along the path of infidelities"

I picture an elderly beggar, his gnarled hand extended, haggard, dirty cloth wrapped aound his eyes and a yellow, crooked toothed smile. The epitome of deception. An element as old as time, the Judas, and the snake. I love this. Very, very strong piece.

[closed]

hey, nice write.

the use of repetition in just the write places moves this along, and we indeed see ''sadness gathering'', personified in those places.

''Crooked fingers point the way
along the path of infidelities
draped in suspicion, and deceit
that's where you will find
sadness gathering...''


That's the best part, to me.
Good imagery too. Will have to read more of you.^

-Dream

[Mason]

i like it! very emotional and true. well done