I reach out in stillness..

Be still your beating heart
For in sleep I am not gone
tho' words may batter, on innocent hands
deep I feel this tender bond.

I reach out for you in stillness..
yet, struggling through many a hand
they touch you in places, I can not
it leaves weaken, this broken man.

Our time together is never long
but within those moments spent
I have lived a lifetime in your love
warmed in your offerings, lent.

You many never fully understand...
I shelter my love, but for an eager few
one thing is certain, one thing is sure
my heart, forever belongs to you.

My mouth choked with your hope
on words that do not flow with ease
In dreams, we have laid down in tall grass along the babbling brook
with you, in you, I am eager to please

I chatter my offerings in short approach
but these things should take a lifetime to achieve
knowing our time draws quickly on stolen minutes
when granted your love's distant reprieve.

So be hush in your heart sullen
I am still waiting, on your forgive
a chastened heart, longing in you
your perfect love I can never outlive

Reviews

[Inkcognito]

Oh, my heart!..
You, Mr Inkslinger, turn my knees to jelly, raise my blood pressure, swiftly melt me into a quivering puddle with your astonishing, loving, tender, romantic, sentimental written creations...you may very well be a health hazard!!

"...we have laid down in tall grass along the babbling brook
with you, in you, I am eager to please" ***deeeep siiiiiiiiiiiiiiigh***

[nicolettox]

I said to myself "Ok, I won't post another poem until I can write this well'. But then, I wouldn't post for a looooooooooooooooong time, assuming I will get this good.
thanks a lot for sharing! =)

[Kenneth The Poet]

The Inkslinger can write, that's for sure. Nice work, brother.

[Jae]

Words cannot express the beauty and raw, passionate emotion of this poem. It was incedibly beautiful with words that would melt any persons cold heart. Bravo to you.

~Rem

[Zoe Jay]

This is a subtle and thoughtful poem. Interesting use of commas to give it an unusual and slightly broken rhythm, which I like. The title is an excellent line. It is really well crafted and the interplay of sounds is well thought out and well executed. It has a really classical feel. I like the subtle and un-intrusive rhyme scheme also, it's perfect for something of this structure and feel, it keeps the poem well bonded together and very readable without being overwhelming. This is both technically excellent, and rich with emotion: all around, a really top-class poem!

[jazmin]

ohmygod! that was... i cant find the right word for this!!! and any word I do come up with will not do it justice:)

[Shelly Braen]

So powerful. The longing is rich, and it seems as if the clock is your enemy. So heart breaking. This love is so strong and so pure. Not innocent, but pure. I dare say that I am deeply touched by this piece. It awakens such a desperation and an element I should like to call, heavy breath. You dazzle me yet again. Gorgeous write.

[Poetic Beauty]

This sounds like a forbidden love. One hid in secret and only a few moments can be stolen here and there. The flow is off here and there but the meaning and sentiment come through loud and clear.

[Brad]

someone has it baaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaad
excellent yearn, wordsmith, you've colored yourself a most pleasing picture

[Shasta]

I love your poem. It is very beautiful.

[Linear]

Romantic, gentle soft as feather down, dont we all just live to love, such sweet sentiments you write so well