Continuous abyss

Whirlpool of sentiments

It seems I can't breath

Clustered denials

Undeniable chains

Beyond the condensing critics

Looming like shadows ahead

Looking down like harmless predators

Ready to pounce at moment

Darkness illuminating light

Light so strange you can't decide:

A helping hand that guides to stand,

Or a vicious enemy that claws your side?

I'm imprisoned in this endless pit

Darkness clouding, voices speaks

All I can do is beg to stop

But it seems its not enough

Will time still come for me?

To feel the breeze pinching my cheeks

For how long would I decide to hide

'Til darkness decides its time to stop.

Reviews

[emman]

Beyond the condensing critics
Looming like shadows ahead
Looking down like harmless predators
Ready to pounce at moment

-We really can't justify absolute goodness from others or even tell the loyalty of others. Some people play the role of an angel that wears a robe of darkness.

[emman]

Hi nak!
This one is awesome! Excellent use of figurative languages and free verse scheme.