"Puddles"

you won't scream anymore because now you are chocking on those words

when you try speak a sound

you just repeat the past

where the first words you spoke

where the same as your last

nothing is left now

just a slow cold lonely death

for you

only the ambulance angels can name your shade of blue

puddles

puddles

puddles of tears

when they give up on your life on top of clean sheets

 

Reviews

[I Am Svetlana]

Hm, another interesting piece. As I read it, I thought of a guy speaking these words to an ex that he's broken up with. Putting her in her place after putting him through Hell. I really enjoyed the imagery and message behind this. My favorite lines would be 'when you try to speak a sound, you just repeat the past'

[stephen dillon]

thanks a ton we should collab

[I Am Svetlana]

Wow, yeah, we should totally collab :) message me about it sometime.

[stephen dillon]

lets do it

[I Am Svetlana]

Hooray :) I can't wait.

[stephen dillon]

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[Kelly A. Brown]

This is really interesting. I'm not quite sure on its meaning, but the imagery and surprising words were fantastic.

[stephen dillon]

its about writting my own closeur to an ex

[Frieda P]

Ooh, dead people, creepy, dark and sinister this one, odd title for it, but it meshes at the end. Enjoyed, even though it was a direful subject.....

[Holly Mason]

love the title
and truly enjoy your pieces content
always nice to read you
thank you for sharing

[ikibala222]

"only the ambulance angels can name your shade of blue"

epic.