"cinderblock"(bi-polaroid android kodachrome catacombs) pt.1"

angry,frustrated,dark,humor

Slamming fists of frutration onto the cold cement walls of my

mind, cracking from every angle and chipping apart at random.

Drunk with emotion i fight agaist myself,evreychance I get to

break my own legs I jump from rooftops into femur cracking landing

stips.

Author's Note

short and simple

Reviews

[Annie Ale]

I want a second verse!

[stephen dillon]

maybe just for you

[Annie Ale]

:)

[stephen dillon]

i wrote one check it out it's called manic it was written per your request

[Holly Mason]

short and simple are sometimes the best take
let it out, now that it is on paper, your whole damn body's safer
now quietly sshshsh thank you for sharing*)_

[Muse]

I talked to your shrink, it sounds like a temper tantrum...if only breaking cement would make us feel better...but smashed bones just equals more hurt...maybe try a quiet time out...go for a walk...listen to some classical music.

[stephen dillon]

definetly a tantrum i had a bad hair day

[Muse]

lol

[Ironygirl]

i like this =)

[stephen dillon]

could you be alittle more specific on what exactly enthralled you?

[Ironygirl]

Simple and brutal.

[Rob Santana]

I like it man. No bullshitting just here in your face.

[stephen dillon]

thats it just the bare bones of a minimalist poem i knew you'd like it creeper

[lee von cleef]

Strips . Now tie the rhythm, to a thread.

[stephen dillon]

explain this further if you don't mind i really don't get what you are saying

[lee von cleef]

Zac Brown "Colder weather video" your short is packed with action,rhythm, as it ends it leaves you broken on the landing strip, extend the light ,now that you have the ear of the readers, watchers, listeners, and the action does have a piece of the market-share , give us a direction to go.ie. the video of zac's,an interp of the song,kicks my a*s every time, I think carried out further your poem could too.