What Smells Have to Say

Composition grapes smashed together into a wine drank from a chalice of texture, and smell, while the swiller of satire has the future seen through a keyhole in a drunkenly distorted haze made abstract by thoughts from "other mind”, the one that stumbles forward onto cobblestone kneecaps. Down River, down Broughton learning from my city what smells have to say and what jazz corner hustler is selling his fix for, maybe nothing but a wolfish grin with teeth dripping in American dollars, have no fear you learned bravery with your craft, garbage disposal logic got you on bus, train, plane where you appear in a poof of light on stage in reading houses, cafe’s, and auditoriums. When particals of your rock n roll language caught on you've made it big,proud?happy? Not quite until you have toppled idols and muted genius. Just remember one thing dig until you have got pay dirt and even then wash away all of livings veil and refuge to publish gold from the mud in which you are made and from which you are named

Author's Note

free-form but pointers are appreciated

Reviews

[Frieda P]

Uniquely different read here. So many places to go with this one...wine in the making, sweet & divine, where it takes us, the travels of a lifetime.

'Not quite until you have toppled idols and muted genius.'

Speaks to me of the poetry of one's life also...nice read.

[stephen dillon]

Oh the smell and the history of wine, the splendor of the grape, grown to alcohol, and what it can do with a daily spirit.
This explosion is unique, I find this most excellent.
Written drunk? just wondering ;-) :D lovely vocabulair my friend
This is unique! 100!

- Elisa

[stephen dillon]

nope i usually only get drunk on xanax and pot plus, lack of sleep if you count that.....thatnx for the review

[stephen dillon]

thanx

Oh once for my insomnia when I was 19 I took Oxazepam, and Temazepam, also those into the "benzodiazepines" group named... so yeah, I can feel the vibe. And you're welcome :)

[stephen dillon]

well you are a swell writer and person

So are you really.... ;-) I am a fan!

[stephen dillon]

most def i think your compositions are the polar opposite of mine you are full of beauty and sadness while i love the blight of my exsistance and embrace it in my work as comedy and also as an obvious outlet

Hmmm interesting, I should read more of you, as you should of me, and then talk again :)

[stephen dillon]

agreed

[Holly Mason]

this holds your attention
wanted more at the end
thank you for sharing

[Raef C. Boylan]

Flows at a good pace, each image flashes and then disperses to be replaced by the next thought. I particularly like "garbage disposal logic", "coblestone kneecaps" and "swiller of satire" - the latter made me think of how cynically bemused we can get when having a drink.

Two grammatical suggestions:
"cafe's" (cafes)
"When particals" (particles)

[Muse]

I like this...it's not poetry..flash fictions..or a prose...just random thoughts. Smells invoke powerful thoughts, some that are good...some bad. My only suggestion on a free-form write...is to offer more pauses. Otherwise, it can read like a "run-on" sentence. I felt like you made this particular smell "metaphor" of course...come to life....it had a voice of it's own. Sarcastic in nature. Nice work.

[lee von cleef]

O K Clay , This was fun ,I think your doing alright.

[Patrick Daniel Read]

nice ink...
and yup sounds like a start of a novel to me as well..

[stephen dillon]

i'm working on somthing like a cross between bukowski,ginsberg,kerouac,and life experience a series of poems called a free-form f**k up

[Gary H]

Sounds a great start to a Kerouac/Bukowski type novel.

Wonder where you will take this?

[stephen dillon]

i'm working on a series of poems called free form f**k-up
but thanx for the kind words

[stephen dillon]

i'll let you know when i am done

[stephen dillon]

would you like to collaborate on something?

[Gary H]

I'm sorry but I'm in the middle of study and coming up to exams over the next couple of years. Thats why I rarely write on here any longer. I'll let you know when I finish as would be interested.

[stephen dillon]

okay sounds great good luck in school