sometime Loneliness

From the comfort of despair,

the tranquility of loneliness.

The aches,

these thorns on flesh

-bare.

It stems from here.

Keep your pity,

calm the fright

and awake your intuition.

Silence

- I can stand it,

though not easily;

won't you pretend

to care?

Reviews

[AprilRN1210]

love the play on words. "it stems from here"
seems to have irony as well in its contrasts. My favorite lines would have to be: "Keep your pity.....and awake your intuition".. if only more people would do this the world would be more compassionate and less self absorbed. Everyone is already pretending though. that's part of the dang problem i think. This one seems to go more with intellect than emotion, which makes me go back and re-read to look deeper, which I love. have missed you, hope all is well. Another nicely written piece my friend. :)

[Inda]

Thanks for the RnR my friend! I am doing well; got a 9-5 so no more late night writing for me. Glad you liked this and shared your thoughts on it, means a lot. :)

[Mr.Writer]

I felt my soul vibrating on this one...
All those emotions spreading around, and the randomness dwelling across...
Well done, keep it up

[APOORVA]

broken heart ??
beautiful words, touched

[Inda]

Im actually doing great for once, but i am glad you liked the piece. I first just thought of that first line and used that to continue.

[APOORVA]

awesome indeed..........

[BBP]

Seems like a story told from someone in a broken relationship.

Welll portrayed

[Inda]

glad you liked it. Did not have that idea in mind when writing it, just the first line came to my head and i took it from there.

[BBP]

Yeah leave it to me to just make up something random hahaha


Either way.. nice write