Say

You tell me there's something you need to say,
its been on your mind all day.
You're trying to hold back your tears;
Doing so ignites my fears.
Your lips quiver,
I shiver
As a tear gets away;
I know just what you're struggling to say.

Reviews

[外人 (Gaiji..]

That's really deep, man ! I could literally imagine the two, one in front of the other. You did a wonderful job, this poem definitely conveys the feeling of the situation ! Also, i enjoyed the fact you never really made it clear, you decided just to let us guess what is obviously going to happen. If u allow me just one thing: your = possesive, you're = you are. I'm sure you just misspelled it due to distraction but it's better if you correct it ;)
Wonderful job !

[Inda]

Thanks for your review! Always glad when you stop by.

[Inda]

There is such a moment here, between the saying of "not saying actually" between the two of you....
Wow, this is something else, I enjoyed it Inda, you always break walls, of poetry with your words.

- Lis x

[Inda]

Thanks Eli, glad you enjoyed it and stopped by! Hi from Miami! ✋

You are so welcome Inda, always, a pleasure to read your work of art.... and Hiiii from a beautiful Europe... full of spring -x- :)

[Nix]

A simple and elegant poem. Elegant flow and elegant execution, all for something that is inherently un-elegant. Well written

[Inda]

Thank you for your most elegant review, means a lot!

[Baby Ricochet]

and it can't be good news

[isus]

oh, really nice, you told everything without saying it. really nice