That's Me

Depression
Comes
With its
Own compensation,

Rhymes
About crimes
And obsession.
Lust, love and passion.

The degradation
Of the warmest sensation
Spread through the meeting of lips,
The unison of hips.

Such a romantic,
Aloof and frantic
-That's me
To a tee.

Reviews

[plainme]

The first 4 lines are.. Very true (pardon for the loss of better words there). It flows really great, gently rolling of your tongue as it is being read, even in your minds eye. It has a rhythm, it rhymes, at places where you least expect it and the finish off is great. Wish it was a longer piece, would happily read on, and on, and on.

[Inda]

Thanks so mich for your review, would be a longer piece, but i felt it would drag a bit.

[Inda]

Much***** not mich lol

[Blue]

Inda, this is short but the beauty is between the lines. Your straightforward approach to words is endearing.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Sounds a bit like me too :) Very expressive and to the point. And yes being down does at times help the creative flow.

[外人 (Gaiji..]

The rhythm of this poem is something priceless !
Words just look to fit perfectly, verses have a melody of their own,
loved it !

[s y e]

Inda, your writes have so much meaning and are so powerful. I really do love this one.

[K. Louis]

this is probably one of my favorite poems by you....really enjoyed the flow and rhyme in this....'spread through the meeting of lips/the unison of hips' -- great line inda

[Baby Ricochet]

Nice rhymes and yes it's true. Depression does come with it's own compensation.

[Yellow Butterfly]

Very open and poetic Inda.... :)

[Inda]

Thanks for the R&R means a lot!