Content/Contempt

Content/Contempt

 

Hand covers her face, her name

Is shame.

Eyes stare down low,

She knows; I know.

 

In her eyes a tear;

Rehearsed expressions I fear.

Her lip hides contempt

And so I leave content.

 

Just,

Robust,

Yet small;

Oh how the mighty fall!

 

Guilt eats away

At her will every day.

Her eyes linger on

-brightened by the sun

 

At night the stars

Are many, like the scars

 the heart bares

and the knife, it tears.

 

 

 

Reviews

[plainme]

In her eyes a tear;
Rehearsed expressions I fear.
wow, this really defines the poem to me, it gives it a completely unexpected twist!
The whole piece gets a certain image across real well. But it is double, and I haven' decided yet which side I like best, I think I'll take them both

[Inda]

Thanks plainme, you can indeed take both sides if you'd like. :)

[Pollai]

The last stanza is beautiful, but so is the rest of it. The flow does it well, I like the pauses and breaks it adds to the somber tone for me. Overall its a very nice from beginning to end. The flow was very smooth and you expressed the sorrow masterfully.

"In her eyes a tear;
Rehearsed expressions I fear.
Her lip hides contempt
And so I leave content."

Written so simply but a very powerful and vivid description, you achieve a lot with short concise stanza's. Good work :)

[Baby Ricochet]

Much pain and sadness here. You captured it well in just a few words, Great job

[s y e]

"At night the stars
Are many, like the scars
the heart bares
and the knife, it tears."

This last stanza packs a punch, it finishes this amazing write of with a bang! :-) Another excellent write, keep it up!

~ Noodle.

[Inda]

Thanks Noodle, means a lot! :)

[quinfinn]

crocodile tears and sad nuances....a liars best friends...or worst enemies. you have captured this quite well, Inda...color me impressed!

[Inda]

thanks Quinfinn, means a lot!