Say it

Say it

 

Sick of me,

mad you couldn’t see

what I hid.

And so you did

What you thought best.

Guess I’m no different than the rest.

I too don’t care

 for you’re as common

as cotton

candy at the fair.

 

Reviews

[Salar Majak]

wow! rage, a lot of rage, it might be a little better if you make it a bit longer, not that i don't love the ending because i adore it!!!!!! but maybe if you added length as to say what happened next it would make the subject more highlighted!
remind me not to get on your angry side XD

[Inda]

thanks, i'll think about expanding this a bit. :)

[Salar Majak]

:D

[quinfinn]

"for you're as common as cotton candy at the fair" wow, she didn't even merit being like a funnel cake! i guess we all know how you feel about this one. well penned. your short writes are so much more than less, dear poet!

[Quiet Child]

this is a good piece, really liking the rhyming on this one.
Great job! (:

[Rachel Anderson]

So much passion and anger in such a short piece. Well conveyed. :)

[Baby Ricochet]

I like it. It's not really angry it's more like "eh, screw you too." Good one

[Inda]

Yep, thanks Ricochet.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Love the cotton candy :) so sweet romantic poem, i love the honesty of this piece, I enjoy reading this beautiful and stunning write. The structure is excellent. Cute story progression all in all a perfect piece for lovers.

[Mariam]

Nice imagery.I like it a lot! The flow is wonderful.

[Inda]

thank you.