A Want

A Want

 

Don’t want to say I’ll wait,

I don’t know if I would.

Don’t want to say stay,

I don’t think you should.

Can’t say,”Hey love me!”

Because I don’t think I love you.

But I want to kiss you,

Take you down,

Drown

In your skin,

Who cares if it’s a sin?

I want to say the things you long to hear,

Say I need you near.

I want to say my arms are lonely,

I want to hear you say

you want me.

I want to hear you say

the words that I can’t,

Because I fear

You don’t

Even notice I’m here.

 

 

Author's Note

Something that just came out in a rush.

Reviews

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Wow, love the word play here great and the thought simply amazing. I love the structure of the poem it is brilliant love it! thanks for sharing!

[Inda]

Thank you!

[Inda]

Well your rushing moments, speak volume. What I liked of this piece is the wordplay which is good... there is a magical lovely cadans in it. The underlaying meaning you expressed well. Thank you my friend

- Elisa

[Inda]

Thank you my friend!
Hello from Miami!

You're so welcome!!! :) waving back from Arnhem (The Netherlands) ;)

[CreativeStroke]

You expressed yourself well in this one Inda. Everyone has needs, we just need to find a way to fulfill them. Well done!

[Inda]

Thank you; means a lot!

[Balkaran Sidhu]

Indiffrent emotions...interesting write..enjoyed

[Balkaran Sidhu]

Indiffrent emotions...interesting write..enjoyed

[Balkaran Sidhu]

Indifferent emotions...but really interesting...

[Inda]

Thanks!

[Rachel Anderson]

Daaaaang. This is a powerful piece. I'm pretty sure everyone can relate to this, which is always a plus. Well written. I can feel the emotions in it. :)

[Inda]

Thanks for the review!

[Baby Ricochet]

Men have needs. Strong, physical, biological needs. If we don't get those needs fulfilled we get weird. So whatever your needs may be, nail them and nail them hard. Good rhyming pattern.

[Inda]

Thanks, means a lot.

[Yellow Butterfly]

We all have needs..... and sometimes those needs don't always NEED love...

I need this one... Nah... doesn't sound the same as... I loved this one...

You have a way..... with words.....:O)

[Inda]

Thank you so much, means a lot!

[Yellow Butterfly]

Don't under estimate the power of your quill...... your a great poet.... :O)