Slow Kill

Slow Kill

 

Water; lungs filling,

ripe for the killing,

unforgiving

life- worth living.

 

Running river,

cold body

shiver,

screams for nobody.

 

Witnessed by the sun

no one is hung,

judged

or rushed.

Reviews

[Quiet Child]

this is a great write! very visual, i really like it. has a certain feeling of dispair and happiness at the same time.

[Inda]

Thank you for your review, glad you liked it!

[Quiet Child]

You're very welcome (:

[Andorianskye]

haunting and very pretty

[Inda]

Thank you!

[plainme]

so short, yet tells a story that can be interpreted in many different ways. I like this a lot.

[Inda]

Thank you!

[Carolann Dowsett]

Wow intense and vivid. What a way to go. Awesome writing Inda.

[Inda]

Yep, preatty gruesome way to go indeed.
Thanks for the R&R

[Carolann Dowsett]

Welcome :)

[CreativeStroke]

This short piece packs quite a lot of intensity within it. Well done my friend!

[Inda]

Thank you!!

[Baby Ricochet]

OOH. Creepy. I like it

[Inda]

Thank you!

[Michael X]

A sculpture of screams, or tragic verse. Written with a dedicated sense of suffering, with hidden answers, creatively invented depth, I like this a lot.

[Inda]

Thank you, means a lot that you took the time to review!

[KAOlmsted]

It says you added this on January 22nd yet it's only the 21st...only slightly less disturbing than this piece ;-) Amazing write. Love this.

[Inda]

I don't know what happened with the dates here, but thanks for the review; glad you liked it!

[KAOlmsted]

WC is like your crazy uncle, the one who always takes out his teeth and chases you around the room with them ;-) I did like it; my pleasure.

[Tree]

Liking the word play Inda. The message was penetrating. Dark. I come away with more questions, and powerful vivid imagery

Diego

[Inda]

Thank you Diego; always appreciate your reviews. :)