Your name

Short, very short story.

Your Name

            She looked so good that she caused pain with every glance and every step she took towards me. I tried my best to hide my loneliness. She stopped inches away from my lips and said, “What you drinking tonight?”

            “Vodka, straight” Was all I said. Then I asked for a double and we tried to out drink one another. Two hours later in my hotel room I was crowned the victor and boy did I enjoy the spoils. I got to taste her breath and feel the fast paced beating of her chest upon my face. I also spent some time stuck between her thighs. She pulled my hair and bit my lips real hard. She ran her nails down my back and asked for more alcohol.

            The daylight surprised us, her more than me. She left in a hurry and left my bottles empty. We broke a lamp or two and I never even asked her for her name. They told me, she was trouble when I asked around and I kept looking for her all over town.

            A couple days later drinking at that pub I heard a commotion and almost didn’t look up; when I did I saw her screaming for some vodka straight. I got two shots and walked slowly towards her, stopped a few inches from her lips and we drank until the morning came. That morning the mystery died, sadly she told me her name.

Reviews

[Inda]

Thnx, haven't done much editing as you pointed out lol.

[KAOlmsted]

Other than going from "she" and "her" in the first three paragraphs and the beginning of the fourth and then changing it to "you" in the end, this was a very good write...you brought us into the scene and that last line really put the exclamation point on it; really well done.

[Inda]

Ok, fixed it, thanks again!