Sleep

Sleep

A Poem by Inda
"

Thoughts I had before I fell asleep.

"

Sleep

 

Green smudge

Stains

The purple shirt.

The heart, nonstop

And the night is uncertain.

The three legged cat searches

For his owner

And I search for sleep.

© 2012 Inda


Author's Note

Inda
I think is too vague no?

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I don't think this piece is too vague, but whatever you did here worked for you. This piece is intriguing and I enjoy reading things that stop and cause me to think. That's what you did here with this piece.

Posted 11 Years Ago


It's not too vague. Intriguing.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Not too vague. It's a fine line. But good poetry always allows some room for the readers imagination to fill in the blanks. I enjoyed this piece, enjoyed the imagery

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Inda

11 Years Ago

Thanks, sometimes it's hard for me to tell if i cross that line.
haha, I don't even know what vague means, But I will say that this is an interesting write. Sounds like your just getting into your dream cycle,just warming up for some serious dreaming.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Inda

11 Years Ago

thanks and yeah i was! lol
Sometimes vague is good...it is here.

p.s. just a small bit of advice: when you post your poetry, make sure you label it as poetry, because not a lot of people click on stories ;-)

Posted 11 Years Ago


Inda

11 Years Ago

Thnx, didn't notice.

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Inda
Inda

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