Take notes

I like to keep you bound in a spiral notebook

Never knowing which is the more painful:

Imagining or remembering?

 

I keep pages of half truths

And hopeful thinking

Distorted with highlighter yellow markings

And scribbled notations

As if to suggest they meant anything more

Than any other page.

 

You’re so heavily marked and notated

That I find myself under the illusion that

You were never blank;

I’ve filled every last page

With the kind of tormented artistry

That gets overlooked on a bookshelf.

 

I like to keep you bound in a spiral notebook

But instead of spirals, you’re guarded like barbed wire.

 

You’re the convict who likes to escape

Like loose leaf pages on the floor of a classroom out to recess…

 

Or a permanent summer vacation.

Reviews

[Greg G]

I really liked the second stanza of this work. The line that stuck with me the most was "distorted with highlighter yellow markings."
I've seen a heavy amount of abuse when it comes to semi-colons or colons, but the use of it here works really well.
My only suggestion is maybe avoid capitalizing the beginning of every line. If that's an intentional stylistic choice that's going over my head, then ignore the suggestion. Otherwise everything else looks great.

[Seshat Nidaba]

The metaphors at the heart of this were very literary to say the least! You are very witty and I like your analysis. or hehe, should I say over-analysis?

[Kestrova]

This was a delight to read, and reread, and it only gets better each and every time. It opened up subtly, but closed in a way that leaves the reader wanting more. A lovely poem! :)