Closer to Self no Reason to Grieve

 

 I have been living my alone

As if it were a lover to be shown

 

In the wake of a lonely day

My heart years for a different way.

 

This life that seems so dead

Is alive, if only in my head.

 

I breathe in the scent that is now,

And wipe the moistness from my brow.

 

If only in my dreams,

Excitement real, I live it seems.

 

And this day that feels a waste, I believe   

Brings me closer to self, no reason to grieve.

Reviews

[Gandré]

This is soo beautiful and true. Exactly what life is about: I believe we need to find our true self, going backwards to the middle, back to the creation, to the beginning of everything. I liked this write filled with honest self observation away of gloss-over, just the naked truth. bravo !!

[1809 Black Plague Decem..]

---loneliness is a hardship in itself, great poem IMOGEAN ---love, mishy

[JohnL]

Before I submit a review, please confirm line 1. Is it correct or should it read 'my life alone'?
JohnL

[I Am THE LADY POET]

Beautiful poem I love it.

[emmajoy]

Writing about self and emotions is pretty difficult, especially in the shape of a poem. Your words truly touched me, some for my 'self'... but maybe, you could have used prose-poetry rather than use rhyming? Really don't like to say things like that - feel free to tear my stuff apart - but I found this a little restricted. The phrase '... this life that seems so dead is alive, if only in my head' - touched something inside me.

(Just read the review below...oops, sorry, seems that we partly feel the same way.)

[Alex McFadyen]

I really like this poem for its theme regarding the self. It would take awhile for me to properly analyze and describe it, which is the sign of a great concept.
However, I disliked the presentation. The rhyming seems forced and unnatural but the imagery is okay.
Overall, I'm glad I read it, but I didn't really enjoy reading it.

Just my opinion.

[Brandon]

I thought this piece was very nicely written. Keep up the good work.

[SM Davis]

Very well done. Yes, indeed. Once you have come to peace wtih yourself, there is nothing outside of yourself that can bring you down.

[Chad Wesley Allbrett]

Amen to that, spring and rebirth from death, (or of the heart death of loneliness), even if only transcendentally.
Thank you, I find this a very hopeful poem.

I like the song you have up as well, it's lovely.

[Ron Reardon]

Awesome!! And the voice recording...amazing! I love it!