Beautiful Young Woman

A beautiful young woman

trapped in a world not meant for her

She is a product of rules & regulations

She is feeling smothered,

yet curious about what is on the other side

As she stands in her livingroom

her husband sits in his chair with a vacant look in his eyes

Sophisticated yet comtemporary looking

but the darkness that is within him tries to control her

She just can't take it anymore

She walks over to the fireplace

climbs on top of it & in her dream world

looks for a way out of this what seemingly wonderful home provides

She is wondering if she can escape from it while

her husband is ever so despondant

She stands in her heel boots & poofy blue dress he has her in

He expects her to look a certain way

playing off of her innocence

She is just a world away

she ponders what is out there

It looks dark from the inside

but really it's the unknown that is being seen

Should she or should she not take that leap

 

 

Reviews

[HopelesslyDevoted]

interesting thoughts.... wonderful poetry!

[Pickleby Davies]

I liked this poem alot. In a way it reminds of the story "Coroline" when shes trying to escape the 'perfect' place. Keep it comin' :)

[Dinesh Sairam]

Definitely one of your better poems. I enjoyed, nor bored, at where the diction and narration took me from one end to the other. I'd say that the absence of punctuations might be the only fallacy. In the hope that you'll fix it soon, I'm giving a 100 :) Keep writing.

[littlelilypurplebride]

Paints a picture of what i indure in life but it's a little different but strange how this paints some of my feelings but i have my son i don't want him taken away so where i am to be is where the LORD leads me i am to be where i am at. but this is interesting makes me think of cinderella. god bless lily

[msharma]

Caricatured the woman beautifully. Feels as if one's life is slowly giving the details.

[Coyote Poetry]

A very interesting story. Felt like a modern day fairytale waiting to go bad. I like the last lines. When someone feels lock away. A small opening may sent them away from you. A excellent poem. Thank you.
Coyote

[Sunflower 20]

i really like how you let this poem end on a cliffhanger, so to speak.. leaving the read to decide, that was really nice touch. Great job!