Hearts Float In Symbolic Tune As Goodbye Blows Off The Wind

Our little one giggles, and it's your voice I hear.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Romance drifts from every corner of our soul

Melodic phrases cleanse the air in tranqulity

Instood of fog evaporating,

hearts float in symbolic tune of our love

We thought the world began and ended with us

 

Nostalgic overwhelms fading happiness

My heart beats of bountiful memories

I watch each one drift like white foamy clouds

off the ocean's horizon

Appreciation of time spent together dampens my cheeks

 

Sea gulls serenade a song in honor of you

Sea salt sensuously touch my lips

Warmth of the sun affectionatly hugs me

Eyes closed, I savor your presence

 

Life's splendor moments with you paint a

portrait of a keepsake

As your ashes flow out to sea,

resoluteness fills my being

Our little one giggles, and it's you I hear

Hearts float in symbolic tune to our love

as goodbye blows off the wind

 

 

Author's Note

Tell me what you think!

Reviews

[Tina Kline]

Impressive! So very beautiful and romantic. It was a joy to read.

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Super talent shown in your writing....
very admirable :)

[?]

Such beautiful and vivid imagery...well written

Loved it from start to finish

What an delightful write. This for me is real poetry. Your words never let me down, as I can read this piece over and over again, and not will get bored. It's so sweet, and touching! I'm in awe of your talent. Thank you.

[Raven Starhawk]

This begins so light and vivid. Slowly it becomes deeper and the shade of love you paint blossoms.

[Robbie~xoxo~]

My thoughts~ You have a surreal way of sweeping me into this world of sadness... you brought waves of yearning to my heart...I felt the good bye...This is Beautifully written my friend!

[Aianarie (INACTIVE)]

I loved it! I like the expressions used. Just remember to watch your grammar and spelling!

First stanza, first line: "corner"
Second stanza, last line: "cheeks"
Third stanza, second line: "sensuously", last line: "affectionately"
Last stanza, first line: is kind of awkward. Splendor is a noun, used here like an adjective. And paints should be paint, because moments is plural. Fourth line: "resoluteness"?

Thanks for sharing, and keep it up!

[Star Wolf]

This is amazing, very beautiful, full of wonderful imagery getting the very romantic point across. Outstanding work here!

[*~*Butterfly Kisses*~*]

What I think?

I think I'm left utterly speechless without words and a review that would do this piece justice. Just one word comes to mind: STUNNING.