The Mansion On The Hillside

For the Creative Poetry Group

  

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

The mansion sats on the hillside

Water crashes on the rocks below

Fog covers the darken earth

A full moon hangs in the sky

An eerie feel surrounds the palace

 

She stands on the balcony over looking

the spectacular view

Home sweet home

Eyes peer from a darken corridor

Tongue licks lips

 

Her flesh prickles with goose bumps

A feeling of impending doom creeps

up her spine

Wolves howl in the distance

Wind shrieks through barren trees

Their branches waving as if trying to

grasp someone

 

Stairs creak as feet step on each step

Breath catches in her throat

Sounds of moaning echo off the walls

The moon spills light from an open window

Something moves in the room up ahead

 

She hovers in a cornor

Frozen with fear

Thunder crackles

Lightning flashes

The beat of her heart vibrates her chest

 

A door sqeaks open

Reality vanishes

Standing before her a vampire

He shows his fangs

"Welcome to my home," Dracula hisses

Her screams mingle with the howling

wolves and wind

 

Author's Note

Tell me what you think!

Reviews

[Alicia Schroeder]

Dracula's seductions.. And fear of his waiting damsel in distress, no one their to save her, she is stuck in the villains thrust.. Great job :)

[realmwriter]

Bride, No. Dinner, Yes! Very good piece here. Well done? Or would you prefer rare. I would take it that rare is more suiting to your tastes.

[Wolf's Dark Song]

She's about to become Dracula's Bride. A very sinister tale, and enjoyable.

[Tina Kline]

Love this! Nicely dark and creepy and dripping with expectation. Did she survive? An outstanding vamp poem.

[Enigma]

I think it was pretty good. Not sure what the challenge was about but the poem was definitely spooky and very descriptive. Well written.

[Shep]

Hillside is one word.. the story it told so dark and wonderful. Enjoyed it nicely done.

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

I love love love this.
This is the real deal.
The genuine gothic dracula...
In all of his odious grandeur.

[Star Wolf]

What happened! Did Dracula drink her blood to turn her or to drain her life? Nicely done. I enjoyed your vampire poem.

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

Nice and short descriptions!

[Poetic Beauty]

This is very descriptive and chilling. You have a minor typo. It should say fangs not vangs. I have done that a time or two myself. I love the moaning walls and the creaking stairs. The wolves howling is a nice touch and the barren trees swaying in the breeze. I felt as if I was standing in this haunted location