A Place Called Heaven

Salvation's Contest

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Heaven, God's blissful home in the sky.

Streets of gold paved for his children,

like the red carpet is rolled out for

HollyWood super stars.

 

Angelic voices sing from the Heavenly Choir,

"Praise To The Lord Our Holy God."

The sound is so enchanting silence falls.

 

Sadden vacancy of emotions.

Tears of pain will not fall.

We will be one big happy family.

Peace will finally reign.

 

Jesus The Son Of God is our night and shining armour.

He paved the road to victory.

Heaven's foundation is everlasting.

 

Sin is an infectious disease that affects us all.

Murder

   Lies

  Stealing

Greed

Addiction

Abusiveness

Cheating

The list goes on, there is no small sin

in God's eyes.

Jesus is the medicene we all need to receive.

He will rescue the perishing.

Chords that bind us to hell will break loose.

 

Salvation is the answer, it's a one way

ticket to Heaven, a gift that cannot be bought

in stores, it is free.

Jesus paid the price for YOU and ME!

 

The directions to salvation is simple as ABC,

there is no twist-n-turns.

A---Admit to God you are a sinner. Repent, turning

away from your sins.

B---Believe that Jesus is God's Son and accept God's gift of forgiveness from your sins.

C---Confess your faith in Jesus Christ as Savior

and Lord.

 

Amazing Grace, how sweet the sound,

That saved a wretch like me.

I once was lost but now am found,

Was blind, but now I see.

 

 

 

Author's Note

Hope all enjoys, tell me what you think!

Reviews

[w2de35657u687y4324rf]

I favor your poems of sex.
"Heaven, God's blissful home in the sky./Streets of gold paved for his children,/like the red carpet is rolled out for/HollyWood super stars."
This shows us how the strive for material possessions, through modernism, has infected religion. You compare life in heaven to life as a celebrity. Both are your dreams-- a fancy of your hopeful conscience.
"....our night and..." our knight in shining...* (sp error)
"....there is not no small sin..." there is not a small sin* (Double negative)
It's funny how you say that no sin is small in the eyes of God, but the way to relieving yourself of this 'sin' is as "simple as ABC". It's almost a paradox, no?
"Amazing Grace, how sweet the sound,..."
This is a very familiar song in America. In fact, it's almost renowned as the national anthem. You make a good point to show us that America, the corrupt, war hungry democracy of shoats, was built (and is still structured) on Christian principles.
Now, I'm just taking this from your piece, but it seems like there is a surplus of flaws within Christianity. Perhaps your local preacher would like to do some editing with your son next Saturday? I'm sure he has a variety of topics to touch on.
By the way, the only imagery was in the beginning so the rest was dry. Perhaps you could try to convey this in a more poetic way?
Keep writing.
SAS

[Searching 4 Serenity]

Perpetually awestruck by profound brilliance. Although still early, your chances are already looking high.

[LadyKarissa]

Your forgot baptism. It states in Matthew Repent, Be Saved, and Be Baptized for the remission of sins. Thanks ever so much for your compliment on piece. I am still struggling just to get every Sunday and watch the clock is hard on me. I know I should return to Mass, but now it is too hard since I lost my beloved late bf Frank. If he were here right now he would tell me to have faith and never to lose it. He has been dead for nearly five years and that struggle continues. Lucie

[Angel Bluestocking]

as much as i want to write something long and very constructive like SAS i can't seem to find that many of the words.
it doesn't sound like much of a poem, PEACE!, i bode no ill, but i really like it.
on the third stanza, the first word "sadden", its supposed to be "sudden"?
i love how you put importance about God and Jesus Christ. hehe~
i especially liked the last stanza, it somehow sums up the whole poem.
keep writing!! hehe~!XD

[Marie Harrison]

I am a Christian and a believer.
I adore your conviction in the poem and the messages.
It might have been trying to convey too many
things in one poem. It was a little
overwhelming to me and I am a believer.
But I did enjoy the poem.

[Kate Hunter]

I like it. It's well written.
Don't let anybody tear you down because of your beliefs.
Keep writing.

[Krystal Nicole]

I absollutely loved it!! Just the inspiration I neede for the day!!! Thanks. .

[Dream Weaver]

There are two things I try to stay away from;
one: Religion and two: Politics, which pretty
much go hand in hand these days. I can tell
you this was inspirational for all those who
believe and I can tell it came from the heart.

[trainwreck]

you did well with this work. Good job on creating an uplifting tone.
spelling errors should be checked though, for example, "recieve" should be "receive"

[Dove]

I really like this you did an amazing job, keep up the good work

[Coyote Poetry]

i have study religion all my life. 43 years of learning taught me. The Christian, Muslim and all religion don't desire war. Both Christian and Muslim state set the example of humble and kind and other will come. Man's re-write words to allow the words to be twisted. Jesus loved the child. I like the desire of this poem. We need the men and woman with love and kindness to stop the hatred and war. Every child and person is a life. A powerful ending to a excellent poem.
Coyote