Lost At Sea(Creative Poetry Group)

A Young woman face life's turmoils.

She is lost at sea, a voyager over troubled water,

saturated in futility. Scars fashion her life, injuries

left with lingering damage to her aching soul.

Scenario of past events blind her.

 

Fluid of tears run down a sullen face.

She's covered in privation.

Born to parents infertile to love, peers

that made her life a living hell, a husband

that's abusive and destructive.

Inept is her life.

 

Cascading emotions control her.

Anger infectious as a disease.

Sadness gloomy as a rain storm

Hate as evil as satan himself.

A wirlpool of disrepute she floats in.

 

Erosion of her life falls at her feet like dust particles.

All dreams feel eradicated.

What she must face next is unpredictable.

She cries an ocean of tears, hoping to be

washed away by the tides that roll in.

 

Continous debris of fear trap her.

Tears splashing aimlessly diminishes bubbling hope.

Tranquil is invisible.

Her life is privy between her and God.

She prayes to see the light house of guiance,

but she's lost at sea, a voyager over troubled water.

 

Author's Note

For the creative poetry group.
I had to write about water, using the words that's in my tag box!
Tell me what you think!

Reviews

[Mauricio Montoya]

I always find hard to write something from pick words and here you've done a great job, keep on writing.

[WindSong]

It's a well written poem with good imagery and delivery but it leaves the reader with a sense of hopelessness, for she is still lost at sea!

WindSong

[Shardbearer99]

Beautifully written and lovely descriptions throughout. A wonderful piece to share.

[Sunflower/Sara Kendrick]

Enjoyed reading this one this eve..This contains maybe aspects that can happen in life but in the end I can feel a peace that this person knows the One that can handle all of life's aspects..Thanks for the kind review of my work..Sunflower

[OT]

some brilliant lines in this - "Born to parents infertile to love," and "Erosion of her life falls at her feet like dust particles." - loved them ones - the concept - lost at sea without the water - lost in mind and spirit - eroding to dust particles that drift through the wind and sea - a voyager over troubled water indeed! nice!

[Marie Harrison]

An amazing poem, filled with emotions.
I enjoyed this heartfelt poem.
I loved how you described
the reasons for the sadness
in her life, it added to the
authenticity of the poem to me.
Fabulous write!

[Coyote Poetry]

Easy to get lost. I like the feel and the motion in this poem. The story in the poem was very good.
"Erosion of her life falls at her feet like dust particles.
All dreams feel eradicated."
Thank you for a excellent poem.
Coyote

[Tina Kline]

This is an excellent poem about turmoil and having to make hard choices. It is very emotional and very well written!

[hmarieee]

This poem left me speechless. It has so much emotion and i really enjoyed reading it. Thank you so much for sharing hun!

[Wolf's Dark Song]

This is very vivid and the images are powerful and give the sense of desperation and hopelessness. A very engaging story in the poem. I really like this.