Aurevoir---Adio's(Goodbye)

Creative Poetry Group A girl friend wants more from her boy friend.

 

He keeps her on a shelf, takes her down only when it complements his ego.

A filament of thread he strings her along.

She wants a commitment, but he likes to play the field. She is only one of his many trophies.

 

Emotions compress her heart.

She wants more, she needs more.

Voices ring in her head that she can do better. She wishes that he would not pass her by. A hallucination of what could of been bring tears to already swollen eyes.

Speculation of his ways tell her he'll never change.

 

It's time she decides to cut the filament of thread, break free and spread her wings and enjoy life. Their love has deteriorated to rancid. The time has come for her to tell him, Aurevior---Adio's (Goodbye)

 

Selfpity robs her blindly.

Confidence is pulverized.

What will she be without him?

Loneliness pulsates.

 

She looks in the mirror of lectures, gives herself a shake, reminds herself she is better than being just someones trophy.

"Aurevior----Adio's (Goodbye)"

She whispers the words in practice.

 

Dour mood transforms into deviation mode.

She's tired of his obstinate behavior.

Little black book she opens.

Date made, but not with him.

 

Sexy back dress.

Untamed locks frame face.

Lips painted.

Eyes gleem with anticipation.

Life is feeling better.

 

Date picks her up on time.

They dine at a luxurious restaurant.

Hotheaded ex walks up.

She stands, kisses him hard on the lips.

"Aurevior----Adio's," she says.

 

He steps back, confused eyes stare at her.

Fluent in French and Spanish, but her English he understands better.

"Goodbye," she says clearly.

Life resuscitated.

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Zackery Alan Daley]

Vocabulary astounded me. It doesn't seem you are use to writing what I consider "generic" these days, which makes me smile. This piece uses the perfect font and bolds at the right time to enhance the emotions produced. After reading it more than once I also see hidden writing patterns that go above 4 or 5 rhyming schemes. This is my own breakdown of a poem or song, but is very impressive. WELL DONE

Zacky D.

[ChantSpace]

You go girl! You did the right thing! I wish more women could be like you!

[Star Wolf]

A very visual poem about the final ending of a relationship. I enjoyed reading this awesome poem.

[Dream Weaver]

A very dramatic piece of writing with
a nice dose of reality in what happens
in relationships gone awry..Nicely done..

[Wolf's Dark Song]

I really like this. It's a very sad story when relationships come to an end but its better to know than not to know.

[Tina Kline]

Often what a person needs to do is the hardest and that is letting go. It ended well in this nicely told story for both, it seems. This is a very compelling piece.

[Brad]

funny, this usually goes both ways and the two part not realizing they both want the same thing

[Priyankaabhilaashi]

Great show..!!!

Keep Sharing..!!!!

[Jeremy Baker]

Strong narrative and imagery - good work!

[Coyote Poetry]

I like this story. Some good advice can be learn in the words. Best take care of your lover or someone else will. I like the ending to a excellent poem.
Coyote