The Unknown Force

Tanya's husband goes missing, then strange things begin to happen in her life!

     Tanya stood looking out the window at her Montana Ranch.  The window pane frosted over at the warmth of her breath.  She shivered at the coldness in the house.  No matter how high she turned the thermostat the house never got warm.  She hasn't been warm since Kyle her husband came up missing.  He left for work one morning and never returned home.

     

     She had hired Detective John Bowing to find her husband, but he only came up empty handed.  The detective had finally told her that just maybe her husband didn't want to be found.  Tanya had lost it and slapped the detective.  He had walked away shaking his head.  Tanya had a break down and spent over a month in a hospital.

 

     Once she was released from the hospital she had moved in with her parents, but Californa wasn't home without Kyle.  One night at the midnight hour while lying in bed unable to sleep, she began to think about Montana.  Her parents had thought she was crazy when she packed up and headed to Montana.

 

     Tanya hadn't known where in Montana she was heading until she saw the for sale sign to this ranch.  The whole time while she had been driving it was as if her car had taken on a life of its own.  Tanya had felt as if she had been pulled here by some unknown force.  She found herself wishing for the midnight hour, it was then she felt the presence of another human being.  The warmth of their lips would softly touch her in a feathery kiss.

 

     Most of the time Tanya was too busy to think about the odd events, the touch of soft lips, scent of a man's cologne.  The bedroom door that had been locked, but now opened.  The room had a rope hanging from the ceiling, which was strange.  She knew it all sounded crazy, but she wasn't unstable.

 

      That night she fell asleep in front of the fireplace.  She felt the warmth of another body touch her.  She wasn't afraid.  The presence felt stronger.  Tanya followed the feeling to the bedroom with the rope.  She knew somehow her questions could be answered in that room.   She began to search for what she didn't know, until she found the bundle of letters in an old cedar chest.

 

     The letters were from Kyle.  Tears filled her eyes as she read letter after letter.  Kyle had left her because he could not give her a baby.  He thought of himself a failure as a man and husband.  Tanya's shoulders shook with grief as she realized Kyle had hung himself in this room.  Kyle had brought her here, it was his presence she felt.

 

     Tanya pulled an old chair over to the rope.  she climbed up in the chair, slipped the noose around her neck.  She wasn't scared, but at peace.  As the clock chimed the midnight hour she jumped.

 

 

Author's Note

This story is for the World 500 group! I hope it's 500 words, I worked on it for three days! I had fun wih this project! tell me what you think!

Reviews

[Poetic Beauty]

This took a dark and twisted turn that I wasn't expecting. This held my attention clearly and would make a great longer piece if you should want to do so. You made the main character come to life. I could almost feel her misery.

[Ladysue]

oh wow I wasn't expected that ending...shocking...sad and tragic..good story telling...

[Kyla H]

Its very eery in a way, but somehow you could tell that she was freed at the end, it had an almost uplifting feeling.

[Wolf's Dark Song]

Shocking and very haunting ending. This is very very chilling, excellent ghost story!

[?]

OMG, I got goose bumps, so sad,and yes tragic story. Was a wonderful story though. Well written. Kept me reading till the end.

[Tina Kline]

Very sad and tragic. I think you did a great job on this, your words kept me interested the whole way though.

[Chris Smith Welshpoetcs]

Great story my friend.

[Dream Weaver]

I thought this was very good...I'm not much of a story person but it
did hold my attention..very good characters and very descriptive!

[CookieMonster♥&h..]

very short buht i lyk it:)

[Coyote Poetry]

A very short and a sad story. To lose someone and find them dead. Would make a sane person lose their mind. A sad ending to a excellent story. Thank you.
Coyote