No Future

A lady spends her time closed off from the world loving someone that is gone.

 

She takes refuge in her house, shielding

herself from the present time.

Trapped in the past where love felt so good.

To come back to the present time she would

have to admit it's over.

 

The solitude is not peaceful, but suffocating.

Memories of him looms in her tired mind.

The thoughts she ponders assail her,

getting her no where.

 

He left her six months ago, needing space to breathe.

His vacancy from her life left her feeling empty and defeated.

Her world had caved around her when he left.

 

Sticks and stones can break bones,

but words can never be taken back.

His words had been like a stone,

knocking her off her feet,

breaking her like humpty dumpty.

 

She watched as life went on without her.

With  trembling hands she lit the logs

in the fireplace.

Each love letter she read, then watched as

they burned to ashes.

 

Breathing became lighter.

Life was to be lived.

She was ready to relinquish the past,

and move back into the present,

and look forward to the future.

She realized there was no future in the past.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Worked on this for two days, hope you like it! please tell me what you think!

Reviews

[Ron]

Really nice, nice work. Imaginative with a good regenerative theme. Line 3 verse 2 should read "she ponders assail her." Also "took" / "taken." (Verse 4) (Breaking!) These are small errors. This is very good work that twangs the reader's emotions. Keep it up.

[Poetic Beauty]

This tells a great tale of lost love and moving forward in a positive direction at the end.

[cartera]

Breathing becomes lighter in the smoke of burning love letters. Like it.
Words of stone that break fragile people. Harder than sticks, some words.
Keep feeling and keep giving us the poetry from these feelings.
Let your mind go wherever, not in search, but just for a wander.
ATB
Alex.

[Tina Kline]

I enjoyed this a lot. From the darkness of pain back to the daylight of life. Getting past the awful hurt of heartache is hard and I'm glad you managed it. She does have a new chance at life.

[Mauricio Montoya]

Denial we all been there, a lost love is hard to let go, every word in this piece sunk in deep to my inner soul for I know the feeling oh so well.
Excellent write.

[closed]

Like your sister, you continue in the way of storytelling. Wish I were more consistent doing that lol. Hey, and I love your stories, they always captivate me. Like this one, they make me feel, laugh cry, think about thigns from another perspective. I always know when reading one of your ''poems'', that you will deliver truth^

write on^

-Dream

[Linear]

It reads like a story, and the ending was so good, for she learned just like me, but the colour you chose well it's hard on my eyes, but your writing was so good, I'm going to let it pass lol
Well done

[steph]

Terrific job

[Jeff]

Absolutely wonderful work here! It's filled with so much pain, and hopelessness. But you turn it around at the end, perfect!

[Poeticadia]

Great narrative poem. The poem works through the sadness and longing of the broken relationship and comes out on top; strong and renewed. I like the short, direct sentences that carry the narrative forward.

[Dream Weaver]

Wow! A beautifully yet sad piece of heartrending sorrow.
This has to be the best I've seen for you, well done...