The Beautiful Lady

A guy sees a beautiful lady, and wants her for himself!

 

He walks in from the freezing snow,

the room is crowded and noisy.

The atmosphere is welcoming,

as if someone has lured him in.

 

He notices right away it's not a

place he would normally  show

his presence, he's about to leave

when the crowd parts, that's when

he sees her.

 

She is all alone, no one pays her

any attention.

Suddenly he feels heated, feet are

immobile, mouth dry.

 

She stares at him with big ocean

blue eyes, that sparkle like the

stars along side the moon.

Her luscious red lips are sightly

puckered, as if waiting for a kiss,

golden blonde hair that drapes over

her shoulders is radiant as the sun.

 

He moves toward her, feeling

mesmerized by her pure beauty.

He has to have her for himself.

Wallet in hand he looks at the

price tag on the portrait of the

beautiful lady.

 

 

Author's Note

Hope you like it, let me know what you think!

Reviews

[Wórdsmíth]

Very funny ... it just really makes me "chuckle" (especially the ending). Well... I must say, this piece`s seemed one of the best writes of my fav. lists... of the day. I always read worthy stuffs where I find "emotions for love" as well as "some charming flavor of soberness" (that makes the heart smile and refreshing) and such things i`ve found in this write. Your work`s quiet good. Liked it. Even I like how you plot "Real" characters and just turn `em into "fantasy" or vice-versa". Keep writing!

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Thank you!

[Alicia Schroeder]

I love poems with a twist at the end, I really thought it was a beautiful lady at the end of the room at first, but a painting, beautiful imagery and fabulous write.. :)

[Sunflower/Sara Kendrick]

Excellent surprise ending that you have presented here..I am glad that I chose his one to read this afternoon..Sunflower

[closed]

well this is a nice poetic approach! You've put a literary spin on the optical illusion. The reader, instead of external eyes, relies on thier internal eyes when reading through, though we discover that wehave each fallen prey to illusion at the end!

Amazing job! I don't think i would have thought of that!

-Dream

[CompellingComposer]

Woah, love the ending! Was kinda a surprise! Nice job, great poem.

[Cherrie Palmer]

Great job, I like the way this unfolds a secret till the very end

[cfix]

This is wonderful, quite the enjoyable read.
Like this one alot, well done!!!

[An owl on the moon]

This was such a beautiful expression of a world of enticement... That look across the room, and then your twist at the end. Loved the piece.. the painting seemed to come alive!

[Liza]

hahaha - unexpected - nice!

[Greg Skura]

You painted a beautiful picture and sold it! Well Done!