What We Used To Be

A COUPLE GROWN APART TRYING TO RECAPTURE THEIR LOVE!

 

Who are you?

We used to know each

other so well,

but now we've grown apart

we don't even recognize each other

 

We used to be so close

you  used to be

my friend, my confidant,my everything

now we're more like enemies

all we do is fight

 

Do you ever ask yourself

Who I am?

we  used to say loving words

to each other but now all

our words do is cut each other

to the bone, leaving our blood

spilling out on the floor

 

Can we get back what we had?

What we used to be?

my insides crumble like an earthquake

at the thought of losing you

 

With my head hung down ,

tears spilling from my eyes

I stretch my hand out toward you,

hoping you won't turn away

that would be my undoing

 

As I raise my head toward you

my eyes grow wide as I see

your hand out stretched to

we clasped hands and stare at

each other, promising to get back

what we used to be

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Had alittle hard time with commas and such! so any help will be nice!

Reviews

[Ron]

The theme of this work (love souring) is common on WC. Good length verses. There is a jarring absence of full stops. The last verse has no punctuation at all. Verse three is the strong one but again punctuation! e.g a comma before "but" and no ending full stop. At times a simple sentece gives added punch, However this writer has potential and potential is fulfilled with experience. So keep writing this is a good piece of work.

[kaylynnmelody♥]

I actually really like it. you are a very good writer, there are a few spelling errors, but other than that, excellent!! :)