The First Time I Saw You

FIRST CRUSH AND NOT BEING NOTICED!

 

 

 

The first time I saw you

my heart melted,

my knees went weak.

I couldn't breath.

I couldn't speak.

All I could do was stare.

 

The first time I saw you

you headed in my direction.

I began to sweat,

until you walked on by

to your special someone.

I realized

The first time I saw you

you didn't see me.

 

Author's Note

HOPE YOU LIKE IT!

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

We always want. What we can't have or is took already. Life can make us crazy and then the emotion of sadness when feeling like a ghost. A very good story in your short poem. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Bette]

i have been hear to many times. Well done

[Cherrie Palmer]

great job of keeping the ending a secret, 1st crush are wonderfully painful

[Deviant Works]

How life hurts. The ones we notice which don't notice us. The ones we want, need in our own way and all they do is pass us by. Great poem.

[Jeff]

Oh man that had to hurt. We've all been there before though. Nice twist on the end.

[Inkcognito]

Ouch!! yes...those butterflies in the stomach...the trembling knees , racing pulse, clammy palms., dry mouth..he reaches out...for the girl standing next to you... crushed! Don't despair...there' will be a second, third and many more other crushes that will work out just fine...(for all you know, he was the prince that turned to a toad on first kiss...not the other way round!! :-)

[Dream Weaver]

I do believe every teenager has went
through this debilitating stage. Even
now I still get flashbacks...

[Detective Watts]

I've only ever related to two poems on here and this is one of them. I collapsed though...

That made her notice me. Not so good though.

[Stacey Watts]

This poem I could relate too. Very well written piece here and such a very telling piece on how crush's go. Nice work.

[Ellen Hammond]

Wow! Who couldn't relate to this poem at some time in their life? You have captured the feeling so well. The ending is sad but it sure is realistic. Really enjoyable read in spite of the memories it conjures up. Keep writing!