Rich man Poor Man

Rich verses poor

     Rich turns to greedy

     Expensive home, clothes and more

     Never satisfied

      Rich people have necessities

      While the poor receive charities 

     Insufficient funds

     Moneyless means pathetic

     Being poor is shameful

     

     

       

     

   

   

   

   

        

      

Author's Note

Collaboration with Karen
First Senryu Kathy did! Couplet (Kathy)
Second Senryu Karen did

Reviews

[Aura]

This is unfortunately true. The rich gets richer and the poor get poorer. Its so strange that the rich who have so much are greedy for more and it is sad how being poor defines your status in society so much that a poor person is seen as pathetic and unimportant. A very candid read

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Thanks for stopping by!

[Aura]

You are welcome!

[Betty Hermelee]

I really like this, but I felt a bit uncomfortable with the last line... "being poor is shameful".... I think being poor is sad, maybe even pitiful, because there really is no shame in being poor; it's just LIFE for so many of us, that we can't help, for one reason or another; that's just my opinion... I like the concept of the poem.
Best, B

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Thanks Betty
WE understand what you are saying about the line being poor is shameful. We meant it in a way that the poor may feel that way.

[Betty Hermelee]

That may be true as well, but I didn't interpret it that way, my mistake....B

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

No problem, Betty!

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks!
Best, B

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

You are welcome, Betty

[Samuel Dickens]

It really doesn't seem fair--the very different hands we're dealt in life. Going back to Vietnam, it was mostly kids of the non-wealthy who fought and died in that war. Several times while in the Navy, I went around soliciting donations for a fellow sailor whose house had burned or similar catastrophe, and invariably, the low-paid enlisteds were far more generous than the officers. (Just the tip of that iceberg) Thank you for a great poem that brings these things to light.

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Thank you!

[William Michael Reeves]

Indenting the lines threw me. I think the subject was intense and I was so caught up in that I didn't see the form. And the poor stay poor because it takes money to make money. But determination can succeed!

Let me school you for a sec. When I first joined the cafe I posted something I thought was haiku. Very quickly learned it was not thanks to Jacob. Much thanks to him. I started studying forms and blew my brain up. These are Senryu. Haiku has to be about nature and reference a season. There's a bunch of rules about Senryu too...about the foibles of man and darkly humorous. Read up on it if interested.

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Thanks for stopping by! I forgot that Haiku was nature! Thanks for reminding me!