The Tomb Is Empty

Crown of Cinquains a garland, about Jesus

                    Jesus

                 The son of God

              Born to be crucified

         On an old, rugged cross for us 

                  He died

                  He died

               For you and me

            For sins we committed

         Transgressions He paid on the cross

                 He bled

                 He bled

               On Good Friday

           He could have saved Himself

        But He loved us too much to fight

                He hung

                

                He hung

           Death couldn't stop Him

           The rock was moved away

        Resurrection morning, He arose

                 He lives

                  He lives

               For everyone 

       Give your heart to Him now

        Salvation will set us all free

                  Our gift

                 

                  Jesus

             For you and me

       He could have saved Himself   

   Resurrection morning, He arose

                Our gift 

                    

              

               

 

           

     

      

     

     

     

      

Author's Note

Tell me what you think!
Thank you, Bill for the help with the last Stanza!

Reviews

[JE Falcon]

You did a nice job of highlighting the parable. --- Yes, a life of hardship for the everlasting reward of eternal life.

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Thank you!

[Patricia Wedel]

dearest Kathy... there is more to Heaven and Earth than we can ever imagine... Your poetry is lovely and gives us Hope and Victory. Bless be the Tie that binds us. I have had Miracles in my Life... I am a Believer. tenderly, Pat

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Thank you for stopping by!

[William Michael Reeves]

Right off the bat I was happy to see someone write a crown. And as I read I thought your wordplay was an excellent bridge between them. I feel like the crown, and if you really go for it, a garland is a challenging profound way to express your thoughts. Something about the rhythm the form creates adds to the words. Your crown would be interesting with the sixth to make a garland. The sixth is made up of your 5. It would go like this...

Jesus
for you and me
He could have saved himself
Resurrection morning, he arose
His gift

Almost reads perfect! That's the trick to the garland. Write the 5 knowing which lines jump to the last.

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

I will have to try again for the garland!

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Bill, I believe I will add this stanza to my poem!

[William Michael Reeves]

I think it would top it off nicely! The way it reads does sum it up in a complete sentence like it should. You just didn't know it. Glad to inspire you.

[William Michael Reeves]

Just noticed what you did under the title. Love it! Nice wording

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Thank you!

[William Michael Reeves]

And that little change to your last line. I can't wait to read one when you know you will be advancing those lines. Next thing you know you'll be writing a Pantoum. Tricky stuff!

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

I am trying to work up to the tricky ones!

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

I give this poem a million amens.

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Thank you!

[Relic]

I think you're pretty spot on. We were taught this when I went to catholic school.

Well said, Kathy. :)

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Thank you!