If Only Her Heart Was Visible

The heart needs to see what the eyes already do!

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Time wasted on fake love and romance

Heart blind-sided from what the eyes already see

Energy spent trying to fill in the signification

Smiles drip from a sad face like raindrops

 

Whispering words of love parade deep in her subconscious,

longing to be reborn into feelings of emotions

Substruction of her heart is losing foundation

Pain presses deep inside

 

Her once perfect world tilts upside down

Truth spills into prisms of light

Perfumed collar breathes another woman

Lipstick kiss on cheek smears affair

 

Cold silken sheets accomodate only her

Frozen memories of lover's nights stir life long ago

Flattery seep from lying lips

His deceit leaves her vulnerable and naked

 

If only her heart was visible it could see the truth like

her eyes already do

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

tell me what you think!

Reviews

[Aianarie (INACTIVE)]

A poignant piece. Great work, my friend.

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Thank you!

[Star Wolf]

I like this. Very interesting idea. If only we could see with our heart we might not make so many bad choices in relationships. Awesome poem!

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Thanks!

[An owl on the moon]

What a haunting look back across pain and passion... the scars of sorrow lingering... and the longing to see more clearly to avoid the overwhelming days that could come. Amazing write.

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Thnks Craig for your kind review!

[Perri]

Deciet=deceit
Loosing=losing
Purfumed=perfumed
Accomnodate=accomodate
Already does should be already do...
OTHERWISE, I enjoyed it =]

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Thanks for your time in helping me edit!

[Bewitching Sensations]

love this.. so so true.. amazing what life throws at us and we have to keep smiling in public

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Thanks!

[Carla, A Branch of the ..]

Some good images, "smiles drip," "cold silken sheets" but need more. Too much telling. Show more. Get deeper to the art of it. Maybe, "freeze" one moment of this dilemma and show us everything about it instead of giving bits of the whole of it, cuz it will be more stirring if you do. Keep workin' it though cuz you are getting there with it.

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Thanks for the advice!

[Kenaz]

Ah, "smiles drip from a sad face like raindrops". What a simile!

Aside: "Like her eyes already do", is this what you meant?

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

No, I meant that she is sad and her smiles is falling like rain!

[Kenaz]

I know this

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

"If only her heart was visible it could see the truth like
her eyes already does"

very mysterious ending to me...nice poem

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Thanks!

[Priyankaabhilaashi]

Good shot..!!!

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Thanks!

[Tina Kline]

Sounds like someone dying of a broken heart. A very painful and tragic situation to be in. I think you did a wonderful job on this very emotional poem.

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Thank you!