A-L-I-C-E

A-L-I-C-E

A Poem by Mack Attack!
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First poem. For my girlfriend Alice :)

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  A is for angel, which is what you are in my eyes.

  L is for love, which is the thing you show to everyone. 

  I is for I love you, the three words I know you will never stop saying.

  C is for calm, the feeling I get when I am with you.

  E is for everything, which is what you mean to me, 
  

© 2011 Mack Attack!


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Mack Attack!
First poem. Is it good? Any mistakes?

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I- is for I love you, which you will never stop saying.

I don't know what I don't like about this line...I think it's because it had a slightly sarcastic touch to it? Yeah, I think that's it, like you're annoyed with her telling you that she loves you? I sure do hope that that's not the case :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


Aw that's really sweet of you:)

Posted 13 Years Ago


great poem. you must really love each other.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Sounds like you really love her.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Awww~ How cute~

Posted 13 Years Ago


its simple but good.. to show how you really feel

Posted 13 Years Ago


There's no such thing as a mistake in poetry, or for any art form for that matter. Unless you mean grammatically and even then theres no such thing as a mistake. Point being no you did not make any mistakes.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Good poem. Good job...

Posted 13 Years Ago


Well it's been a while since I've seen this type of poetry, it is refreshingly subtle and ripe with feeling, great emotion and balanced wording, well done, good read.

Posted 13 Years Ago


really beautiful write, i think it's lovely who ever it is for.

Posted 13 Years Ago



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somewhere over the rainbow , Canada



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What should I say? My girlfriend told me to join this site, so I decided to. I am 17. Turning 18 in October. I write poems. They aren't really good but whatever. So yeah..that's it... more..

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