Fly

Fly

A Story by Erin Was Here.
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A short story using only monosyllabic words.

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       My toes hang off the edge of the dock. I see fish dart through the cool a few feet below me. I take a breath and think. I do not want to jump, but I know I will. The green glass smiles at me, the hot sun seems to frown on my back. I feel the burn. I drop to my side and look in the lake. I drop my hand in and swirl it in the cool. I watch as the glass moves and rolls into folds of silk. I take my hand back and watch as the silk lies still and is glass again. I stare and I see the clouds in the glass. They drift like soft down in the wind. I smile.

       A fish comes to the top and breaks the clouds. The fish’s lips make more folds in the water. I feel the sun on my back and it tells me to jump into the cold. I know the sun leaves me no choice. I get up and stretch my arms to the sky. I take one last look over the edge, but I do not think about what I will do. I walk down the dock to the shore. When I reach the end of the dock, I stop and turn to view the green lake and the dock. The edge of the dock looks miles from me, like a vast road, but I close my eyes and begin to run.

       My feet feel the warm wood under them. I know I will soon reach the edge but I do not stop. I feel the air rush past me and I smell the tang of the pines that watch me. I feel my feet leave the wood of the dock and I fly.  My hands grip the air, my feet flail, and I grin. I am in the sky.       

 

© 2008 Erin Was Here.


Author's Note

Erin Was Here.
This was an English assigment....we had to write a story using only monosyllabic words. I had trouble with mine because my whole story was about water and the word "water" was two syllables! This forced me to use metaphors for water, which turned out to be okay in the end.

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Wow i like it...its really good.
Great Job :)

Posted 15 Years Ago


Really great! I like the simile. or metaphor. or whatever it's called. Nice and short too!
Keep up the goo-ood work.

Posted 15 Years Ago


Wow! I loved the flow of the story. And I totally knew you were talking about water even though you barely used it at all! That takes talent. I'm sure it does.
This is just a small something I noticed, but you used quite a few short sentences in the story. Maybe this was part of the assignment...? I don't know, they just didn't seem to fit with the rest of the flow.
That's all I could see. Loved it.
P.S. I'm heading for that badge. You'll get it soon. Very.

Posted 15 Years Ago


haha I was going to ask if it was an English Lit class assignment. Very good. But I have one word for you:

BE-LOW!

Two syllables.

Well, and "water" was used once, but I'll let it slide.

Posted 16 Years Ago


Wow!!! Great Write!!

Posted 16 Years Ago



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