auditions

you'll see!

you feel your fingers tense to your sides

your hand sweats on the microphone

the spotlight's on you

only you

everyone staring

people screaming

daring you

open your mouth

song rushes out in a beautiful melody

leave yourself

your mouth stretching in a wide grin

almost sad to hear the last note roll off your tongue

untense,

as the audience rise

in a standing ovation

Author's Note

hello!

Reviews

[Bec]

Wow what an audition.
Makes me shudder to think.

[Sindu]

So apt and relatable. Nice one! :)

[hardeep sabharwal]

its great, I can feel it, very near to my heart, :D

[Botania]

Great fantasy writing. If only... still smiling.

[realmwriter]

I can sing and I like to do karaoke not that that is the same but I kinda know this feeling. Only in part though cause I think I would be too tense and too nervous to actually do it for real. Though I so want to do spoken word poetry, but alas, there exists no venue for it here in my small town. Love this piece, can almost see me standing there.

[Frieda P]

If I could only carry a tune...your poetry sang instead, well said.

[BennyBooth]

I couldn't help but picture 'X factor' and watch you on stage! I know that is not the best review but it is how this played out in my mind... Well done! :))

[Ashira Macy]

So true! Auditions and performances can give you so much adrenaline. When you are up there in front of people, singing, dancing, or acting your heart out that thundering applause and standing ovation is the best thanks you could ever hope for. I didn't know you performed!

[Shapirta]

i dont, actually! but i have a more-than-decent voice, and my dream is to audition on britians got talent, but unfortunately,i can't, because men cannot hear me sing. kinda really sucks, right?

[Ashira Macy]

Oh yeah, I have never agreed with that rule. I grew up conservative, so I have always sung in front of men. That is unfortunate. :-/

[Shapirta]

it makes sense, but... like, this is my DREAM, u r talking about! =(

[Ashira Macy]

Well maybe eventually you can make your own choice. For now just keep your voice excersized!

[Shapirta]

yea. actually, when I am twelve, I choose my path. but i am not straying. i dont want to walk around aimlessly in life. I was brought here for a reason,and i am going to fulfill my goal. also, the harder something is, the greater reward we get in the next world.

[Ashira Macy]

Good for you! It is good to know what you want so young.

[Shapirta]

i'll take that as a compliment! =)

[Ashira Macy]

It definitely is! I am a fan of yours, have been from the first story I read that you wrote.

[Regina K. Pride]

This is nice. It really brings back some memories (I was once in a children's choir). The way you wrote this piece captured the nervousness of the moment. Here are some minor things that you could change though:

you feel your fingers tense to your sides -> cut "you feel" to capture the urgency
your hand sweats on the microphone
the spotlight's on you
only you
everyone staring
people screaming
daring you
open your mouth
song rushes out in a beautiful melody -> maybe put this line in italics or parentheses
leave yourself
your mouth stretching in a wide grin -> maybe put this line in italics or parentheses
almost sad to hear the last note roll off your tongue
untense,-> maybe use the word "loose" instead?
as the audience rise -> change "rise" to "rises"
in a standing ovation -> cut "a"

Goo job! :)

[Baby Ricochet]

This brought to mind Karaoke night at the local watering hole.