The bad Ending

okay this one is about me

I used to day dream about;

us holding hands

me getting a kiss after lunch

getting in trouble for PDA

you hugging me before i get in the bus

PPL enving you and i

I used to wish apon a shouting star

to feel your beautiful hair in my hands

for you not to hate me

i used to wish that you would chose me over her

and now i wonder if i wished wrong.

Author's Note

ignore spelling. What do you think?

Reviews

[17thWhitePrince]

WoW !!!
A Twist At The End !!!
WoW !!!
Aren't You Tricky !!!
I Liked It !!!
WoW !!!
Very Smart Indeed !!!
WoW !!!

and yet ... if it is about you ... then, I'm sorry that happened to you :(
It shouldn't be that way at all ... no it shouldn't be ... EVER
anyway ... it was well penned for sure !!!

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Sometimes the thing we wish for are not what we need.
Unanswered prayers are often a blessing in disguise.

[Changed to a New Accoun..]

good job..iv wondered the same tyhings many times and it sux to wonder "what if?"
nice poem

[Lorraine]

I like the ending. It was quite unexpected, like a fairytale gone wrong. Nice poem. I see you derived this poem from your own feelings, no wonder it has such impact. I just hope you already moved on. Great Job writing this.

Keep Writing. ^___^

[~Mariposa Una Lila~]

i think it's very lovely! you go for what you want, and you cant ever be wrong! x0x0x0x00xx

[Steve]

I really liked this especially that somber last line, a great write!

[Aekmy]

Very well penned. :D

[the nothing]

W.T.F I thought he was gonna die at the end but this is worse to have someone you love love another

[Tallulah]

I love this. the imagery is beautiful.