Cross

I have no idea if this is worth a read. o_o

You are my cross

And I am yours.

Whatever happens to you,

I shall take the brunt

And vice versa.

The same rusty nail

Will pierce my palm

After it is done

With yours

And my crown

Of thorns

Shall adorn your sweaty,

Matted head

In full corporal

Regalia.

Together

We look up as

Golgotha looms,

Skull-like and craggy

In the gray distance.

Three o’clock is such

A long time, an uneasy time,

To be bided as we hang

Side by side

Like meat in the market.

But wait we shall,

And the curtains in the temple

Will rightly rip,

The rocks will split

And the earth will heave and groan

In that moment

When

You are my cross

And I am yours.

Author's Note

Crucify me! Alright, I'm a cornball. Erm. Tell me, is this blasphemous or something? I don't want to offend anybody.

Reviews

[Philosophile. (Maddy)]

I don't think it's blasphemous. Actually, I often wonder why the cross is used as a representation of hope when the cross has been used as a torture device repeatedly. The way I read it is that either Jesus or the cross is talking. This was quite the interesting perspective here, so creative! As usual, a great read!

[Zatoichi]

blasphemous, no
corny and overwrought, yeah.
you asked for honesty in another post and I respect your talent enough to offer it.
you are a great writer and i look forward to reading more. Z

[Wunderlich]

It shouldn't matter if someone finds this blasphemous as you did not intend to offend anybody, you are simply writing what you want to write, trying to convey an idea. Somebody is bound to take offense to this, but hey, I think it's a great read. The perspective is very interesting, as I found it to be told from the cross's view. It's good :D