Asthma Attack

I'm asthmatic and I got into a coughing fit after reading this STRAIGHT. lol.

I suppose this has to start somewhere but where reality ends the lunacy sinks in and out and on and on hello there ive said far too much maybe but its best to keep on and on  and let me speak through my pen when did it start i can only surmise because you and i were a circle not a perfect circle mind you but something a first grader scrawled with a red crayon on bond paper all squiggles and tremulous curves but its alright a-ok okey dokey because hey serpents eat their tails and they make nice circles anyway even if they get bent a bit here and there so lets pretend that youre the serpent and im eves apple but yeah we can swap roles like we swap spit if you want to because we held on too tightly to ever know where you ended and where i began but did it all begin in some rain battered conference room where you said your name and asked for mine i cant seem to recall which is which but it was there all right and so were you so well throw a party to commemorate that eh and well be dressed to the nines with straitjackets and sedatives and pills and tranquilizer shots will be our finger food and my asthmas coming back in sharp puffs like the ones you breathed on my collarbone and the ones i breathed into the space on the back of your right earlobe and perhaps as a souvenir ill give you pheromones in a bottle tightly sealed with a cork i want to stop i really do but each time my pen leaves the paper it comes back to write another word another set of words litanies chants you conduct the ceremony my priest and ill be the ritual sacrifice with the ink on this sheet of paper transubstantized into blood yes i always write your name on my forearm hey will the words formed by the ink sink into the flesh and into my bloodstream and poison me i dont know if so then youll kill me but maybe ill kill you first i have to stop i really have to stop but then again aren’t we just one circle without beginning without end i have to stop look at all the rules of syntax im breaking look ma no punctuation marks but i know you wont care anyway because we broke the rules together on that humid afternoon and afterwards the rain beat down on the roof of your house but nows not the best time to remember but what have i been doing all this time than just hearing the drip drops the steady rain that will flood me out of the house until i have to get on a boat and paddle my way looking for you where did you go where did you hide why did you go where do i begin i have to stop i must not begin must stop i have to stop right stop stop stop st–

 

 

Author's Note

Go ahead. Say what you want but say it with honesty.

Reviews

[Wunderlich]

I can't imagine trying to read this aloud, lol. I like the style you used to write this piece. The title, the style, the context, they all fit together so well. The similes you used were great, I loved the descriptions, and pretty much everything else. This is a story that could give someone with OCD one hell of a fit. I'm not the best reviewer, but I just figured I'd say that it's awesome and I really like it.