My Invisible Friend

I know my God is the right God, because [Holy Book] says so. I know that [Holy Book] is right because it's written by my God. This circular reasoning bugs me. So I wrote a bad poem about it.

My Invisible Friend

My Invisible Friend is better than yours,

the book I say He wrote says so.

And if the words I say He said are true,

What hope for the likes of you?

It's a circular dance, round and round we go.

Whose dogma will win? Nobody knows.

One thing that's tricky, and persistently so,

My Invisible Friend is anothers' Invisible Foe.

Author's Note

Content Note: This is a scribble - a quick bit of off-the-top of my head (bad) poetry. Not polished, and I think incomplete.

Context Note: it's not an indictment of religion, religious people, religious books, religious writing, religious buildings etc. It's a bit of pent up frustration over a particular circular self-righteous and self-referential argument that *some* religious people use to claim religious superiority. Just so the record is set straight! I'm not out to offend any innocent bystanders (just the guilty ones)! ;)

Reviews

[V.B.]

This is not bad poetry. I've seen a ton of religious satire attempted through poetry, and honestly, it all comes off sounding heavy-handed and trite. This, on the other hand, accomplishes through tongue-in-cheek what the vast majority seem to have failed at: it gets its point across.

Sure the words themselves are nothing amazingly original, but the way you lead people to the conclusion you want without forcing it on them definitely is. I really enjoyed this--well done!

[Nishant Gupta]

wonderful poem , do review mine one " QUEST OF LIFE".

[SkinlessFrank]

I feel like a steamroller has crushed my face into the gravel.

[Dalrymple]

Well, it's def interesting. Religion will never have proof. Always faith or lack of.

[Abigail T]

oh, goodness. i feel the exact same way! talk about truly relating to poetry. d: i get so bogged down when my friends and strangers fight and fight and fight about seemingly nothing. you voice your frustration powerfully here, and i very much appreciate it. usually i ask for poets (and writers in general) to use rhyming as a chance to expand their vocabularies and create interesting and unexpected rhymes, but this piece definitely doesn't need it.

thank you so much for sharing!

[SilentVerses]

The scruffy meanders make it a complete in its incomplete verse, a wander through the mind of yourself as the annoyance and confusion spill from your head and to help you see why you thrust words into poetry and with it have come up with an interesting ditty, short and simple but wonderfully versed.

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Yeah layered poetry here. Fantastic:)

[tHe]

Cute and enjoyable

[Lela]

I just loved it! It's witty and playful and clever. And it makes me like the poet. So there you have it. Great job!

[Joiedevivre]

Excellent! Really love this and very refreshing to read some rhymes. Worthy premise, playfully approached.

[Winslow Des Totes]

:D This was fun! I especially liked the undertone of sarcasm, that was neither overpowering or too low. :D Great write!! My new favorite!