The Liquid Path

from 'The Way of Grass'

The river of tears

in the ocean of stars 

and here we are

on its different banks 

walking the edge 

of the liquid path 

two naked souls 

still all alone 

but we will try 

to overcome

and we'll survive

in these new bodies 

of pure spring water

and moonlight bliss

just please do your best 

my beloved

as we have refused

to stay humans 

apart

for liquid minds

so live and flexible

for being always

and ever together  

in the twinkling eyes

of eternity

Reviews

[MOON]

Beautiful delicate write love and eternity.

[Rahul]

Nicely penned !

[Nona]

amazing flow of incredibly beautiful metaphors - uplifting piece!!!

[symmetryAsymmetry]

why is it so difficult to find and sustain true love in the form we are born in...why must we live believing that our love shall be consummated once we cross this realm of materialism?...this hope, along with the doubts attached to it, is more tormenting than the actual separation.

The poem is beautiful...the use of ethereal images creates an almost divine aura...even the most cynical will find beauty in this dance of love...

[emmajoy]

What a beautiful place the 'we' have reached. 'in the twinkling eyes
of eternity' .. each line has a special touch but those last two paint a sky full of ever and endless happiness!

[Mockingbird]

that's a beautiful poem about two souls shedding their earthly bodies and becoming one with the universe, and refuse to stay in a world of sadness or pain. i like the image of liquid minds, liquid path. great piece.

[Demi Rose]

intriguing and effective. i love ur style of poems. u write with heart.

[Kelly Scheppers]

I came back to read more, and I've found that you really are as wonderful as you seem! You write beautifully, allowing your reader to be whisked away.

I look forward to reading more, Igor!



My best,
Kelly

[Marie]

Beautiful phrasing. I love the thought of eternity having "twinkling eyes"...gives it a whole new concept.

[J. J. Nightingale]

MMMM .. THIS LEAVES ME BREATHLESS .. .. SUCH THOUGHTS, I HAVE NEVER READ ..

THANK YOU .. ..

JASMINE .. .