i am milk

"I tend to find shade in the sunny afternoons. Pale skin like mine burns to quickly. I tend to find the shade in my own heart on days I spend alone. But I am workig through these things, sometimes his suns to much for my eyes and skin. But I love his warmth."

Prove to me that time is moving and i am moving too
because my feet are planted in place and my heart is too
yet all of the things around me are moving and bluring into one

i'm in awe
in awe of all the things you do
protect me
protect me from myself and the things that still linger deep within my mind
sometimes they creep in, they creep in from the dark
they pull at me, they drag me down
but I no longer want to carry them..

i am tired
and i've been working on the changes
i just hope that you see.. i'm trying i'm always trying

Reviews

[Rob Santana]

Deep write Sarah, good work.

[Divenire]

It's been a long time since I've been on this site long enough to make a review but i am milk is an amazing piece of work and I had to compliment you.

I can sense a blast of emotions here and it seems like the speaker is going through a great change within. While sometimes alone I get the feeling that there is someone or a reason that keeps the speaker going through the change which is comforting at times. I enjoyed the trip I experienced while reading this, it almost feels like something from a episode in my life :) Kudos and Good luck

[Sarah Ramsbottom]

than you so much!

[scripted]

love this poem
its meaning is hidden
how writing is supposed to be
good job!!!!!!

[Sarah Ramsbottom]

thank you , very kind

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i think the title indicates that this speaker could be a nurturing individual...but is too afraid to get into the sun of a relationships because of past burns...she wants to show love but can't.

i've been there, i understand this...parts are diary sounding, parts are poem sounding...but there is a really good "letting it out" with this.

a couple slight glitches could easily be fixed...."Pale skin like mine burns too quickly..."sometimes his sun's too much for my eyes and skin..."

"blurring into one"

i feel you could play with this a bit and make it into poetic verse quite easily...as it reads more like prose.

yet it is identifiable.

jacob

[Sarah Ramsbottom]

thank you so much. This just like all my ohter 'writings' are straight from my journal! I think you hit the nail on the head , I have had such ugly and messy relationships with people.. and this was a reminder to me.

[Patrick Henry]

I like this one from you. I received it as you were giving a sort of speech or something. When you neared the end, you were saying goodbye and making a case for your status as you finished..... and then, BOOM!! You knock the microphone from the stand you are at, smile, and walk away!! : ) This would be a fun poem to see read aloud. xoxo -Mark

[Sarah Ramsbottom]

lol thanks so much. I may actaully read this at a open mic nite now:)

[luviva]

ohh i loved the ending..."i'm always trying" so full of content, carried in a three worded sentence. loved it

[Sarah Ramsbottom]

thank you very much!

[Damien Davison]

Heh, not what I was expecting! Title though me off a little, lol. I thought it was good, you could feel fear, longing, your pleas ringing loud. Powerful, great!

[Sarah Ramsbottom]

thank you, all these things are journal writings. Just like you i am in recovery.(I cut)Im in recovery of my past life , and mistakes!

[Pradeep Nair]

"Prove to me that time is moving and i am moving too
because my feet are planted in place and my heart is too
yet all of the things around me are moving and bluring into one"
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Powerful words... powerful cliche..

touching too....

keep the good work moving..

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

love this, deeply emotionally touching, written sooooooo well.

[ms. barrie]

i love your choice of words you used in this poem. very unique, yet it has a very pleasing rhythm and flow to it. beauty in its poignancy. wonderfully penned, as one can relate to this:

Prove to me that time is moving and i am moving too
because my feet are planted in place and my heart is too
*yet all of the things around me are moving and bluring into one*

and:

i am tired
and i've been working on the changes
i just hope that you see.. i'm trying i'm always trying

--- i could very well relate to this last stanza. thanks for sharing

[Sarah Ramsbottom]

thank you :)

[ms. barrie]

you welcome :)