Love

Still starting, but heres what Ive been working on

Love is silent

Always violent

Never steady

But always heavy

Together with destruction

Fed by envy

Taking its collection

Enslaved by its constraints

Bathing in its flames

So close to death

Feeling less

Never confess

Opening my heart

I fold

Its cold

So cold...

Opening my eyes

Shes mine

I'll be fine

I'll be fine...

Author's Note

like I said, still starting, so go easy :). Reviews would help lots.

Reviews

[Falcon1]

Kind and gentle flow. Showing you put a lot of heart behind your writings a true blessing.

[Sarissari]

Thank you falcon. I did XD

[Lana Huskins]

This flows with emotion. Good job!

[Sarissari]

Thanks lana

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Love have so many forms like life on this earth. yes you will be fine true love give you what you already have. true love is you and you will be fine

[Sarissari]

Thanks again Martin :)

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

Its nice, such a lovely poem :)

[Sarissari]

Thank you sky.

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

Welcome Sarissari.

[CWilder]

The wall we have build around our hearts leave us cold icy and alone. I love what you have so far. Please continue

[Sarissari]

thank you CWilder

[lua]

i personally relish the stagnated structure, there is a relatable fluctuation between love as a destructive entity, but also the corresponding yearning for it that overrides the pain it brings - an internal battle with oneself, good job

[Sarissari]

Thank you lua.

[Luis]

Very nice poem. I love the harsh cacophony of your words: it's sort of bittersweet. This poem, when read out loud, makes me feel lost. I personally don't agree with your structure, but that might just be me.

[Sarissari]

Thanks for the review, Luis. I wanted to try something different with my structure. The spaces and perspective is on purpose.

[Luis]

It's not bad, just personally not to my liking. Other than that your poem was great!

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Hello Sarissari.
To me this poem feels like an anxiety attack.
And the calm comes with the realization that your love is still with you.

[Sarissari]

Hello Ivy, thanks for the review. Love is so confusing sometimes just had to write about it.

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Indeed it is. You are welcome.